All Comments on 'A Changing Life Ch. 01'

you seem to have a good way with words

keep going!

5*

LAYING IT OUT WELL, WILL ENJOY YOUR PROGRESS.

I liked what I have read so far. I just hate segmented story's. It interrupts the flow of the story and is therefor distracting.

While it is a good start, it needs a hell of a lot of editing, first off, you should learn the difference between THAN and THEN, you used THAN every time it should have been then. Please, if you're going to submit the rest, get it edited.

Ditto earlier comments. Good story.

You need an editor to learn to write well. For example, you simply cannot go back and forth between past tense and present tense as though it doesn't matter. VERY confusing!!

Looking forward to future chapters.

"Should of?"

You mean "should have"!

Interesting start of a story.

Please continue.