by ThePurpleDragon
You are a good writer and the spelling and grammar is mostly very good. I warmed to the story and enjoyed that very much. If you don't mind just a bit of advice, it would be more enjoyable if you could keep the names straight. Jake kept making entrances at odd times and it made me wonder how many times you've rewritten this particular story? In any event thanks for an enjoyable 20 minutes and hope your life is good.
A five-star story. I thoroughly enjoy your psychological / emotional approach to sex. You are a writer I look for new stories from Thx