by Blondie2187
I dont know where you come from but a loogaroo is a werewolf, and in no way possible is a loogaroo able to make people into vampires, you need to research your stories more before you write them, when facts arent right people wont take you seriously
Hey guys in my defense I was perrrrrdi tipsy when I wrote this, and I probably won’t correct it. So love how she buttoned his shit! Just kidding, but seriously sorry for the grammar and sentence structure ☺
... at "She reached the first button of his shit"! But I suspect you weren't trying to be funny. So - more proofreading needed. The story itself seems to be good.
Poor spelling, lousy word choice clumsy sentence structure and not a very good feel for the periods about which you're writing. On the plus side it was short, so at least I didn't waste all that much time with it.
Pity, in the hands of a decent writer the basic idea could yield a good story. Of course, in the hands of decent writers it already has -- nothing even approaching original in the writing either.