All Comments on 'A Crossing of Paths'

It needs a conclusion.

A little rough around the edges, needs spell checking (going into Canada, meets a "Boarder Agent"...), nice start, needs a sequel but sometimes it's nice to let the reader use teir imagination. Liked it.

Great start, this needs to be contnued to a loving conclusion.

Your writing is exceptional.

Good story! Needs another chapter.

5

I did wonder if they found a route.

Well plotted. Good details but spell check doesn't give you enough - it gives you the wrong word but correctly spelled. Like several uses of affect when you meant effect. And numerous others. Find a volunteer editor.

Best read of the night for me. Good storyline and well written. Thanks for sharing.

I got a little lost in the technical terms at the beginning, but agree that it's a good story that needs spell-checking. But I disagree that it needs another chapter. Some things should be left to the reader's imagination.

A Glock in 45acp in Grizzly Country? No thanks, I'd rather have a Ruger Super Redhawk 454 Casull revolver loaded with six rounds of 365-gr SuperHardCast Hammerhead ammo as a sidearm. 45acp is just going to piss off the grizzly while a 454 Casull 365gr Hammerhead will give the grizzly a nice dirt nap.