All Comments on 'A Different Kind of Discipline'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
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Your story has a lot of potential, but some parts were unrealistic. A professor who "was young, serious, career driven" wouldn't just walk into the dorms to personally deliver a paper to a student; senior students rarely live in dorms anyways! That's not how college works. The professor really jumped the gun when he came, and that event happened so suddenly that it seemed unwarranted. I liked the kinkiness and general idea, but I think you could improve on it.

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