All Comments on 'A Different Kind Of Revenge'

So the guy was lousy in bed, had a smaller dick, and she didn't like him. Sure, I can see her logic.

Psychotic husband can't figure out why his wife would cheat on a nutjob like him.

Wife decides to look outside her marriage for what she's not getting inside of it so she starts an affair with a man she's not all that keen on (and who decides whether she continues to get paid or not) and with whom sex is at best mediocre. I suppose that somewhere in the world there are people like these two but I'm glad I don't move in their orbit.

What story.

He forgives her months long affair and the abuse she heaped on him just because she cooked him dinner? Ridiculous!

I presume that @Just_Words is single since he doesn't know that the normal marriage vows contained the words "to have and to hold" rather than the "to love and to hold" that he claims.

It is disappointing to see a writer promise a Part 2 that never materializes, but the story seems to be shaping up as an RAAC so maybe the lack of a continuation is for the best.

This was published 13 years ago. What happened to part 2?

The actual vow is "...to love and to hold...until death do us part." Holding a spouse in a loveless marriage to punish them and claim you are keeping your vows is not keeping your vows.

Good premise for a story, but what, IMHO, ruined the story is the threat of murder and violence. That trope is, again IMHO, a lazy way to drive this story.

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I will look over the author's other stories, to see if this is typical of his style. Do not want to think negatively of an author's work, based on only one story.

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Pasqual

Good start of a story but why would he want her in his bed. Move her into the guest room, and maybe when guests come do different.

Once the trust goes so does caring. My ex wanted me to stay in the house and be room mates (we had gotten good at that.

I told her she was nuts.

Best thing I ever did was take an out of state job.

Pathetic wimpy cuckold

One cliche after another, literally cut and paste from several different stories. Every dumb LW trope there is was used here, not one thing was original to any degree.

Also, and I get it, so many authors are no brighter than the readers, this "She slowly opened the envelope and looked at the contents.

Inside were at least a hundred pictures of her and Jed in dozens of positions having sex. All were time and date stamped."

Considering PI photos tend to be far larger than the usual family 4x6 pictures...a hundred photos would require a BIGLY envelop and most likely a fucking box.

Wimpy cuck on show. He'll probably end up being fucked in the ass by Nelson and others of his Mistress's fuck buddies.

Just another pathetic RAAC story.

TOTAL SHIT.

No part two. That would have been good.

Damn, this was practically revenge against the reader. A whole lotta bluster ultimately going nowhere.

a WIMP story! 1 star

you are so pathetic. if I was him, I would screw both and the company and be a billionaire. LOL

Just another pathetic RAAC story!

I wished that My problem was that simple. I have been cut off from sex now for 30 years The Problem is I have not another Man taking My wife's time away from me Before we Married I told My wife if we say the I DO's the only way out of our Marriage is one of Us would have to Die! .If nothing else I am a Man of my word. This all happened because of having our only son 36 years ago I as well as Her wanted several Kids but when He was born 3 week late during the C section He came out Pissing and Crapping and the Doctor never put in any type of Drain tube and she had a abbesses and without talking to me decided No More kids ever and to accomplish that No More sex ! I have never cheated on Her and because of my Moral ideas will never will.

Per comment his last story

Did anyone else finish as FTDS did

johntwheels@aol.com

someone who cant forgive isn't much of a man now is he. great start. I liked it so far

keep it going

lee

After reading all his comments I think he has two dicks and plays with both of them.

he had a major stroke and is barely more than a vegetable- he can't leave his bed, let alone type

Hey, that is a positive fucking story. She keeps shaped up and life could get normal.

There was no sequel? That's a shame. It was shaping up to be a very interesting story.

Go to the cops. Tell every family member. And then wait. Gun in hand. Anyone tries to hurt anyone, they get shot. After one gets shot, they all quit trying. He doesn't have enough money to pay guys to carry out his wishes. Nor is he a "made" man. No military friends that might help him. So his threats are meaningless. She could pick up her family and move away and he'd never find her. Laughably bad.

...her punishment was to stay married and fuck whoever she wants? And absolutely no revenge on her boss? His lifelong loveless marriage lasted one day? Wtf?

Loklie

Hey its only a fictitious story..

So often we read stories asking why husbands just step aside and make no statement that the marriage is over in time to stop the cheating. Here, one did. Thanks.

Chur bro awesome story

Why do all the cheaters not realize how good the marriage was until they're in danger of losing it? The sex wasn't that great, the husband was bigger. It was just the thrill of doing something taboo. Neither the lover or I wanted to leave our marriages. It was just sex, not love. Such bullshit. Burn them all.

as proof that ingnorance rules society. The wife`s a slut. yet you find issue with the husband. I`ll bet your the kind of idiot that would blame the husband if the wife cheated and got knocked up. in your eyes the husband didnt have to work to take care of the family. But then if she cheated at work, it still would be his fault because she wanted to work. So stop and smell the cuckold scented flowers on your lapel, and save us you 1/2 a penny sense from your comments

Another unfinished story. As it's not complete 2*

For those who read the comments she cheats, husband says blah blah, she makes a dinner and he forgives her. Not even joking.

No where does it say these are true stories, why do some people want to make them real. Enjoy the free stories some are better than others but, all are free! The writers are brave enough to submit these works for us to read and many of us read the works as they are offered. Without begging for you to like them before offering.

Anothe phyco husband. She had Stockholm syndrome he will kill her one day.

Great information to share. If you get caught cheating all you gotta do is cook your guy a roast and all is forgiven. Who knew!

1 star without an ending.

Just don't like stories where nothing or little happens to the interloper! He should have gotten fucked up big time!

Her torture will be even more severe when she starts to see that he is as nice and well mannered as he always was, but that now she is just a house mate, a domestic partner, a platonic unit of shallow complacent cordiality.

The lack of sex will be uncomfortable. It will be when he starts having sex with other women and totally ignoring her that her true situation will come crashing down. She will start out enduing, then begging, then protesting, then daring, until she finally starts fucking other men, again. And then she will see that his response is totally neutral. It will be like his sister or aunt is living with him, dating or not, happy or not, healthy or not. Just pay her share of the expenses and leave him the fuck alone.

At some point she will finally do the right thing, and divorce him, setting him free of her and his commitment to their now fake marriage. He probably will never be truly happy again, unless he gets very lucky and meets a very special woman. She is so shallow and selfish and stupid that she will easily remarry and have a life as mediocre and bland as her personality, until her second husband can no longer stand her and kicks her to the curb for a younger more attractive shallow stupid bimbo.

Guess there really didn't need to be a continuation of the obvious.

who don't finishe 'there' work?? where is the wrok going? over here over there.

if you comment, please use proper English THEIR work. please learn the language unless you use English as a second language than decent job ;(

Maybe time for someone else to FinishTheDamnStory!

Just to keep some cum slut. Wouldn't it be easier to just dump the skank? Where's part 2?

Where's part 2? I despise authors who don't finish there work. Until a part 2 comes you deserve a score of 0. Sort it out.

Why would he insist that that skank share his bed? No one would know that he had the whore sleeping in another room so why have her in the bed with him? keep her in another room and if he wanted to fuck her,just stroll in dump a load of cum in her and go back to his room. Just like her boyfriend. And speaking of the boyfriend, she wasn't fucking a dildo. He would have to pay.

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She went straight to the cops and he was arrested. While he was in jail she got a U-haul and moved everything she wanted out of the house and took all the money. She told her lover and her family what her husband said and told them she was leaving. She moved across the Country, changed her name and found another job. The first person her husband tries or succeeds in killing sends him to prison for life and she could move back if she likes. More likely he gets killed the first time he tries to kill someone. What is he? A NAVY Seal? This was just idiotic drivel.

Why would this guy forgive so easily when the tramp screwed him over for so long, cuckolded him and showed such total contempt for him. There is absolutely no love involved there and he should be thinking just how long before her lack of respect for him rears its ugly head and she starts looking for another dick to suck. Her lack of consideration for him and disrespect is such that she doesn't have to get any enjoyment out of the fucking just so long as she gets the pleasure of humiliating the husband.

Please

Maybe I missed it, but where the heck is Part 2?! Part 1 had the start of a good story, but without part 2, it really ain't "All That". I gave it 1 star, that's about all it's worth, unfinished.

Could be a nice story if you could write it without the next couple of sentences after "If you try to divorce me...", it could be a compelling story. As it is, it's Yet Another LW Story With A Navy Seal. Isn't that fantasy played out? You're a good writer. I'll bet you can come up with something believable enough to engage us folks without Mafia connections.

I like it when the people in stories both have self restraint. He got his point across by having all evidence so there could be no back talk and she allowed him to have his way. The conversation wasn't side tracked by her blaming him for doing or not doing something. As far as the threats, no one has friends who Will carry out killing and maiming if something were to happen to them. Just try to find support so you could go to the pharmacy for medication for a dying loved one or you can asked for help when moving, that's when you find out how many friends you really have.!

She knew her husband was bluffing and wouldn't really hurt a fly, so she told her lover about part of the threat to kick him to the curb. She wasn't afraid and using his rationale she hoped she could reverse things. (She did)

To me she was proven correct by his actions when he came home at the end of the next day. I'm optimistic but, she'll find a way around him in the future and do what she wants.

(Poor man writing this is either lucky or just don't understand how smart some women are)

One day he threatens to have them killed, the next , he's hugging her. HIGHLY UNLIKELY.

No heart-quickening sense of betrayal. No wrenching pleas for forgiveness. I like your approach and your thinking. Jim's approach was appropriate, and his response to her efforts showed a clear sense of control that will strengthen his approach in this or any future relationship.

If by different you mean none at all. I guess you can call that different. What did this pussy do. Not a fucking thing. 1*

Your intro is fairly good but it goes downhill after that. There needs to be more of a middle ground so that we can experience Clara's guilt, pain, and punishment and the reconciliation of the fear of her husband and the fear of losing her marriage. This story had TONS of potential, just gotta round it out. Id recommend reposting as part of a series or at least extending it to a 4 pages or so. There is lots of material here: more info on how the affair started, time spent on the ways in which the husband makes her suffer for her crimes, and how he directs her in earning back his respect. I put emphasis on how he directs her, as (and this is born out of a personal preference) he should become the master in the relationship. If it were me, id strip her down as a person and rebuild her in the proper manner. But you are the author, take it whatever direction you wish; mine was just a suggestion.

unfinished. 1*

It needs some revenge. Otherwise, a very sly start.

just to offset the asshole of LIT's 1 vote

he really went belly up there very quickly. Turned wimp in 3.1 seconds flat. Ruined the story.

Upper Management gets a set of pictures of Jed. Fired. walks out to his car and ... ends up in the hospital castrated. She finally submits to her husband giving to him that which she had denied him in the past. It took time. but before long, he had her back.

Like your diary.

After announcing that he was going to kill everyone I think she did one of two things. Took her i-phone down to the police with their recorded conversation and had him sent immediately to jail. Hired a bodyguard while she got a divorce, sold the house, changed her name and moved far away. She then lived happily ever after. Since Jim wasn't James Bond, didn't know a bunch of trained assassins nor did he have the unlimited resources it would have taken to make the arrangements to have everyone killed after he went to prison, she wasn't afraid at all. Making for a better story, she beat Jim to the punch and shot him dead one night in the house after carefully letting people know for weeks that Jim was beating her in retaliation for her affair. She self inflicted the bruises over the weeks and went to the hospital so they had a record of her injuries. That one night while he was beating her, she got his gun and killed him in self defense. One she shot him, she smashed herself into the door jamb and broke her wrist. Then she scraped his fingernails along her arm, getting her skin under his nails. That was all she needed to get a not guilty verdict. All done. Stupid story.

what a wimp!

I agree with EgoTrixi. I am so glad that there is someone else besides myself, that is apparently disgusted with people who seem to have lost the the ability to finish a damn story. like EgoTrixi I have been saying along, if you people, or wanna be authors can't finish a frigging story then don't bother to write one in the first place. Shit, you actually had a pretty good story going here then what you get stupid or something ? one star till you finish this damn story.

...but hopefully the end of another "writer" who is just unable to finish what he´d begun. If you cannot end it - do not bother to start.

that this will be any kind of fix-it at all. TK U MLJ LV NV

When I found out my wife was cheating, I laid down similar rules. I told her she could keep fucking him or do whatever she wanted, but we weren't getting a divorce. We had three little girls that need a good home. I also told her we'd sleep in the same bed because I wasn't sleeping on the couch, although she could if she wanted to. And lastly, I told her never to touch me again. She was in tears and swore she'd break it off. I told her to fuck off and die, I really didn't give a shit.

After the first week, she told me she'd contacted Bill and told him it was over. To that, I answered it was up to her, I didn't give a shit if she fucked an entire football team. She was a whore, nothing else. More tears followed. A week later she was going nuts because I refused to touch her and actually reached out and tried to touch my dick after we'd went to be. I grabbed her hand HARD and told her if she did that again, she better figure out an excuse to tell the hospital, because I was going to cut her fucking hand off if it happened again.

A few weeks or month later, she was almost wild with no intimacy. I'm not talking about sex, more of the touches, hugs and things we'd always done, things all married couples did. So she invited her folks over for dinner and then did her best to crawl all over me to show what a great marriage we had to her parents. Finally, I smiled and excused my wife and I and we went to the kitchen. I explained, if she touched me again, I was going to break her jaw in front of her own parents. She knew I wasn't joking and I wasn't. I would have done it.

Her next affair started at about the 6 month mark. It was funny, it didn't seem to make her any happier. In fact, she was the most unhappy person and I had ever seen. Getting cock wasn't getting her actually loving, just a sperm deposit. Now, I'm lucky. Lucky in that my brother and cousins are police officers and know a lot of people. A call got me a syringe filled with some really nasty stuff, syphilis for sure and I hoped HIV. I waited until she drank too much one night and gave her a little pinprick with it and voila, she was infected!

It turns out she ended up with a bad case of the clap, not HIV. Better yet, she gave it to her boyfriend and he gave it to his wife! They broke up and my wife started going wild again after a few months of no intimacy. I guess the guy across the street was good enough and she infected him. Yep, she went in to the clinic and got it taken care of, but the instant I knew she was fucking someone else, I gave her another little pinprick while she slept.. Infection city! His wife wasn't very happy either, they were both in their 60's.

So far it's been 9 years. I've not touch her and spend little time at home. I have a girlfriend and we're getting serious. My wife? Every time she finds a new boyfriend she comes down with the clap or one time crabs, passing it along to her lover.

God, revenge is awesome!

Ok so where the hell is part 2 or are the readers suppose to try and guess what the hell happens. What bothers the fuck out of me is all of you wanna be authors that leave a story like this without an ending. If you didn't have an ending in sight why did you attempt to write the frigging story in the first place. Well if you ever decide to give the readers the second part of this story maybe then I'll give it a rating. Because at this point I would have it somewhere in the neighborhood of a minus 3

"I'm going to punish you for the rest of the time that both of us are alive by never ever EVER E.V.E.R. EVER! loving you again... you know, unless maybe you immediately quit your job and dump your lover and fix my meals and just generally behave like a loving wife should... otherwise I mean it, I sure do.........."

"Oh, by the way, don't worry, I will at no point think that you're doing this just to keep me from killing your entire family off because who would think that a person would be sly enough to ACT all loving to save their family? What sense would that make...? Even though you should realistically worry every single day that I'll get hit by a bus, choke on a chicken bone, have a fatal heart attack or countless other legitimate ways of honestly dying before canceling the en masse hits."

Yeah, so she SAYS she knew he had a rough upbringing and is fairly certain he WILL carry through on his promise........ and yet....... she felt safe enough to screw around on him...??

Wasn't better for this be only 1 part? I don't see the need for part 2...But the writer choosed to say that would be part 2....the question is: where is it?

...Good thing you do not write for a living - you would starve...

Is there a part 2?

What is he? All seeing and all knowing? She should grab every penney and move far, far away. Hire and attorney before she leaves and leave a deposition about his threats. If anyone in her family is hurt, he's going to jail. And she'll be free. A nice, but implausible story. Besides, why would he want to stay with her anyway? To punish her for cheating? That has to be the stupidest idea yet. Who's he punishing more?

Are Snowballs Better Than NO-BALLS, TK U MLJ LV NV

in the same house (At least until he is ready to do something else.). But I can't understand why he would want her to sleep in the same bed. He should enjoy an open marriage, irrespective of what she decides to do. My former wife and talked about doing that, but I had a better offer elsewhere.

"It was becoming boring and she had begun to feel cheap."

DUH? When you have an affair, YOU ARE CHEAP.

He's already messed up badly in my opinion. Do exactly as he started, but never EVER touch her again. Not ever, for any reason. And when she slips, just a hair, make sure someone dies. Force her to live in a loveless marriage until she dies, which preferably, will be by her own hand.

that is how I read it, and enjoyed for what it is. 3 stars

This guy wants to paint a picture of him being omnipresent and all powerful. Who does he think he is? Head of the Mafia? Don't make me laugh. Get an attorney. Go to the Police. Get a divorce and get half or more. All done. Anyone gets hurt he goes to jail forever and you get ALL the resources which means he isn't hurting a cockroach from jail. Even for fiction this storyline was garbage. A "1".

Fuck your shit story dude. -5

A very good means to keep the marriage. now that she's no longer employed there, The Company should be informed of the indescretions and a packet of pics delivered to Jed's wife. with clara's face hidden. with a small note attached stating; "Just to let you know."

Read it again. No hope.

Maybe god would say that he was released from his vows but Jim's integrity said no way. Just another way to show his character. Good job

thank you for not writing anymore.

about Once a cheater, Always trust and verify, TK U MLJ LV NV

Writing.

Divorce would mean admitting failure and also breaking the vows he made before family, friends, his priest and most of all God.

Like God blames the victims of rape, murder, and adultery:"oh you bad soul I'll send you to hell for being a victim!".... err see what i mean,,the vows in marriage last as long as they are not broken by either party, but once they are the victim is free of any vows.PS dont let a priest or whatever tell you different that's them just trying to get more money.

Inform family and friends, arrange to move or ask for witness protection program and move all family then have him spend a long long time in prison. Since he isn't some wealthy guy that has an endless supply of money the story would be done.

Just not a plausible threat or story.

I did not take the score but feel the 'nay-sayers' who have not made any submission are in the majority.

The negative 'anony-mouses' also seem to be in the majority.

All I can say to all of these so cogent critics that if you know so much get your hands on the keyboard. instead of your selfish parts, and also get off your butts and show us what good you are.

Remember we are reading fantasy.

no my friend, i would call you an idiot.

He's the all powerful, all seeing Mr. Magic? Divorce the stupid husband and move away. What? He has worldwide connections? Inform the authorities of his threats and see if he really wants to spend the rest of his life in jail. He's blowing hot air.

It does have the ability to stand on its own - but a finish would have been nice lolk

Please never finish your stories to piss him off.

........forsaking all others is conditional...a spouse must uphold all other vows to merit this....and also acknowledged is, that marriage is viewed as an exclusive and unique intimacy between a husband and wife.....in general this being symbolized as sex...but for purpose should be a defined relationship between the parties so defining themselves as being married..... so he was not wrong in redefining their recognition of intimacy as in name and perception of the(for lack of better term) public and peers

FOR FUCKS SAKE!!!!! FINISH YOUR FUCKING STORIES, THIS IS THE 5TH I HAVE READ THAT SAID END OF PART ONE, DON'T FUCKING WRITE AND SUBMIT A STORY YOU HAVE NO INTENTION OF EVER FINISHING!

Why the fuck would anyone write a story if they dont plan to finish it? It says end of part one at the end, where is part two? What kind of a sadist would do this? Shame on the author.

it has been almost three years since this one and six and a half since the one before it, never going to see a continuation of this.

Your story had all sorts of potential, and could have gone in any direction you might have wanted. However, I have to voice my displeasure with how you got from Point A to Point B - specifically, that you really didn't put any effort into developing the story line so that the reconciliation at the end actually made sense.

Please keep in mind (though I shouldn't have to tell you this, since you were the one who wrote the story in the first place): your hero has reached such a point that he has decided to go for vengeance, and is going to do so in a singularly-Machiavellian way...he's going to sentence his wife to the hell of a loveless marriage. By any stretch of the imagination, this means that he's written off the relationship, and now has decided that all he really has going for him is revenge. So why on Earth would this change in any way, shape or form? More importantly, why would it be even the slightest bit believable for this change to happen in a matter of the 72 hours between Friday evening and Monday evening?

What makes fiction of any sort readable is the author's ability to get those who read his or her work to suspend their disbelief. You need to create a world in which the characters are going to react and respond in a manner which is consistent with the world around them. You're the author; you get to choose what the particular conditions of that world are...but you had better choose well, because it's when the characters deviate from that world that the entire work falls apart.

...and that is what happened here.

Put some extra effort into explaining what steps Clara continues to take to both change her ways and become the wife she should have been. Explore Jim's conflict as he feels the temptation to give in from his previous stance of vengeance. Relish the opportunities to depict not only the forward progress these two make, but also the setbacks which they encounter. There is plenty of potential here for you to exploit. Just make sure that it gets the reader logically from one point to the next.

So when will he get Revenge on Jed and what will he do to make Wifey regret her actions Like doing a younger girl or a Friend of hers.