by DrowsDilemma
A great story line
Good mix of plot and sex
Waiting for ch 6
The plot thickens and things are starting to look interesting for this young Drow. Its good to see that she's not a totally twisted bitch, like Quenthel Baenre, but more like Halisstra Melarn. There is a hard edge to her, but a sliver of light has found its way into her soul, giving her a chance for redemption. I'm awaiting chapter 6 with great interest! Keep it up!
I felt a one-paragraph sex scene was anticlimactic. And you lost me at the word "cunnilingus." A most unromantic word in erotic literature.
However, I doubt that my comments will be read taking into consideration how long it has been since the story has been published.
The storyline however, is good and I'm willing to continue reading. And I've read your biography and I hope that things are going well for you now.