All Comments on 'A Family Destroyed Ch. 04'

Does that mean his grandmother is like a guardian angel. I didn't see Matt becoming Brittany coming. Does this mean he forgive his mother. His mom, sis and aunt all had tellings for him. I guest his mom was at the end of her rope for her to do what she did.

Is this the end of the story.

Yes, this is the end of this story.

As for his grandmother, I guess she sort of was. By the prologue yes his feelings for them softened as to his grandmother's wish.

You know I have a hard time commenting on your stories since I have ended up liking them all. This story is and was truly EPIC! In this story as well as your other series I've enjoyed your character development, It's why I've gotten into them so much. I Wish I could write like that!

I think you knew that this was coming, but, Are you sure there's not a little more gas in that tank?! Can't wait for other stories! Ha, ha!

And Thanks Again.

Jneric2691

Maybe in time there might be a crossover with all four families who knows. Mom's the word. Mwhahaha!

Is Adam the same as a cabin in the woods.

My favorite of all your stories! It started out as any of your other stories with a betrayed son/brother who abandoned his family and morphed spectacularly into the wayward son returning and healing wounds with his family! It has the right level of flow to it that it felt like it wasn’t rushed into the reconciliation and sex. Wonderful... I can’t wait for your next new series.. and the continuation of your current ones

Guess again TLB. I'll give you a hint I only used the name Brittany once for a character in another story.

Brittany a son wants to be a girl

Amazing Plot ... And Amy ,Caroline and Paula were amazing bitches

Adam A Cabin in the Wood's, Brittany A son wants to be a girl,Cody.

Well, TLB you got me one the Adam one, lol, totally forgot I named the son that.

He was the one stuck overseas in Europe after dear old dad screwed over their vacation that allowed brother and sister to reconnect.

Yep, you are correct, man, you know my stories better than I do. Lmao.

I must say that you are a great storyteller,I have only recently discovered literotica and I must say that you.xarth and silkstockingslover got me into stories like this. And this along with a son forced are two of my favorite story lines I have read. Thanks for giving them great conclusions. P.S I know you have other things going on but could you continue The abandoned son and Family secrets they both deserve continuing.

in all good conscience, I can't give you five stars for this chapter.Don't get me wrong, it was a good story and a better than average chapter and I liked reading the story. I even liked reading it but I have just one little problem. Pamela,Caroline and Amy are supposed to be older than Simon and, by that more mature than Simon. In this chapter however, they were nothing more than spoiled, whiny brats st the start. If they did not get their way, then they would whine and pout. St the start of this chapter to the middle of it, Son was more mature, more adult than the three of them put together. Don't get me wrong, I LOVED seeing Melody and his father get what they deserved but, the whininess of Pamela, Caroline, and Amy took away from the overall chapter. Just my opinion.

Shrugs. To each his own.

a great Ending, damn fine work, 5 Stars

DI'd you enjoy the gangbang and the cockold happy?

Sorry, I can't get it up Soul. I just don't get why, I get it, and others don't. At least nobody picked up on what I told you about. If they ever do that really will be funny. I loved the whole series. You truly are a Superior storyteller. Thank you for letting me have a early look, and wanting to grind my teeth that I wont get this good. Thanks again for your help

Jneric2691

So the reason his mother did what she did she was at the end of her rope the way the others treated her.

Pretty much

Dude great story truly great the wait for this chapter was killing me I am glad melody got what she deserved I was hoping for more but thank you for ending this story with a great chapter

THROUGHOUT THE WHOLE STORY, GIVING YOU A SOLID 5 STARS EACH TIME, I PRAYED YOU GO BACK TO SCHOOL AND TAKE AN ENGLISH AND LITERARY COURSE AT HIGH SCHOOL AND COLLEGE LEVELS SO I WOULDN'T HAVE TO EDIT YOUR STORY SO FREAKING MUCH TO GET TO LOAD IT INTO MY TEXT READER. WHY THE dot dot dot's? BEING A SENIOR EDITOR (RETIRED) AND HAVING TO SPEND SO MUCH TIME EDITING, I'D WISHED EACH TIME I HAD LICENSED MY SOFTWARE EDITING PROGRAM I USED AS AN EDITOR. IF I HAD TO SPEND MORE THAN ONE MINUTE VISUALLY SCANNING 10 PAGES, I'D TOSS THE PAGES IN THE GARBAGE PALE AND ORDER MY SECRETARY OVER MY LAP AND GIVE HER A GOOD SPANKING FOR PASSING IT ON TO ME. I THINK SHE DID IT ON PURPOSE LIKING MY SPANKINGS. I FUCKING LOVED YOUR STORY, I JUST WISH YOU KNEW HOW TO WRITE ONE! OH YEAH, I LEFT ONE MISTAKE IN MY COMMENT! CAN YOU FIND IT? I WONDER?

It couldn't have been any better. Looking forward to your next story.And just long enough .

love it have read again and still love it. I like how he got that bitch of a ex-girlfriend. it' good he found out about her before he fucked her that would of been bad

Please please please write more about these guys. Loved the story sad to see it end

I loved your story, it was great, from start to finish. The way you drew the interaction out between the characters, and how each part picked up seamlessly from the last. The finale could have been a little more in depth, but the epilogue wrapped the whole series up nicely.

I must admit to having grimaced several times over your verbiage and other problems. You need an editor big time. But I absolutely love this story. I wasn't sure that I wanted it to go any further, but the way you continued it was just perfect. Please keep writing!!

I planned on it.

Love the story from start to finish, would love another set of stories about the meeting between the 4 families. So please write another set of something similar as this is the second time I've read this and apart from some mistakes it's still a good read.

Please add some additional chapters.

Well done! Very yummy and full of surprises too! Thank you!

A great story! But you need to learn to form sentences.

Well you did it again, another good story. I look forward to your next on.

I liked the story overall but did not like a few things you put in the story but can't please everyone now can you. I feel this story falls victim that most stories do and that is the need to keep adding the number of pussies or dicks getting fucked in a story and Simon's story came full circle with him getting pissed about his whole family fucking everyone to him fucking his whole family. I am glad you didn't include or hint at the possibility of all four families ending up in a partner swapping orgy after bringing them together because that kills any emotion for characters i get from the story. I tolerate multiple partners if it stays in a family depending on tye situation. This is the third story of yours I read and have been generally please with them and look forward to reading the rest. I hope one day to read a true love story without all the multiple partners and women that fuck any cock that they see. That's just my cup of tea but I'm just another whinny reader. Good luck in the future writings to come and again great job.

Had the potential to be good. He was betrayed by all of them,Drugged and raped by his mother and his immediate family lied and stabbed him in the back. And all is forgiven. Bullshit. And way to much blah blah blah. 2 *

I would like to see the meet and greet between the families.

I would like to see what happened at the meet and greet between the families.

What a beautiful end to this amazing story!

I'm emotionally drained, first was tearing up then I actually had to list to "Hallelujah" & reread the beautiful beginning with his grandma. Next I'm extremely turned on by the fact that Simon was going to his his sister, mom, & aunt with, his grandma's permission? Major Kink of mine! Then I'm pissed that my hear was racing when it turns out that Melody & their father were worse than they were in part 1.

Next I'm laughing pretty hard at dinner scene with all 3 ladies & bar scene with Adam, Cody, & Brittany. Though I'm not into transgender if one of my close friends decided to go through with the operation I would hope all of us would act the same. Oh yeah, when Amy picked up Simon I was dying laughing from Amy being jealous about Brittany kissing Simon then as they drive off she is still jealous of Brittany.

Lastly I felt my heart grow with the epilogue. Not only did you give us closure to finalize your story, you left us with a tear & a laugh in quick succession.

Bravo! Please keep writing & don't forget that you can always revisit this story with continuation, if you were so inclined ;-), but also some spin offs with the "extended" families.

I SURE WISHED THE AUTHOR WOULD ASS JUST ONE MORE CHAPTER TO WRAP UP THIS SERIES AS I NOTICED THE AUTHOR IS STILL ACTIVE!

I would give the story 3 stars overall. I enjoyed it for the most part, but the grammar was so atrocious in places it was downright painful to try and read. Perhaps English is not your native language? A good editor would have possibly made it a 4 star rating.

Just amazing love stories, best I ever read.

Big 5 STAR

Just wow

PS: Please don't listen to Balok64 STUPID

comment.

Yes this does show a need for a proofreader .... The story stands on its own. I have it five stars for the story alone.

I really enjoyed this story and I gave it a 5 star rating. I just recently started following you and so far have liked everything I have read please keep them coming.

Just finished reading this again. Still a 5 start story, would love a continuation of it, maybe set just after the motel scene, talking about there trip to the lake house and the families integrating though I don't see him sharing his 3 women is think it would be more of a wholesome family gathering as friends not lovers.

He should have strung them along but never fucked any of those sluts. He should have wound up with a decent woman

I had your story in my list at one point then my cumputer crashed and had to get another one. all my stories disappeared . But I found you story again I have enjoyed it so much.

I just finished this 4 parter for the second time. I'll be honest, there where parts I didn't like. I have an aversion to manipulation by so-called "loved ones", and those that forgive them seemingly so easily. I do give you credit for trying to make it at least somewhat believable (though to me it felt like an afterthought instead of part of the original plot). But that's just one readers opinion of YOUR story in YOUR universe, so take it with a grain of salt. I do have to say the grandma and her ghost were a nice twist. Even though she too manipulated her grandson, it was for his own good and done with true love in mind, so that's easy to overcome. I thank you for ALL your stories I've read a few and some multiple times.

While I'm writing you I would like to know if anymore of UNBELIEVABLE will be coming soon?

And, as an aspiring writer myself (once I get my new laptop) if you would be opposed to me or anyone borrowing plot lines (inspiration) for stories, not plagiarism or even trying to "1 up" you. Simply putting my own spin in my own universe? I would give credit where it's due, I just really like your style, it inspires me.

Thanks again,

Fuzzy_Kbear

This inclusion of his family kind of turned him into a different version of his parents. He should have brolen free. That would have made for a better tale IMO.

How does one forgive, forget, then in part reintroduce what was doen to him as a youngster?

Not bad writing. I just could not tie the plot into the character development.

Chapter 1 was awesome, Chapter 2 and everything else after that went off the rails when he caved and became exactly what he hated, an incestuous whore. 1 Star.,

Was there a chapter 3.5 I missed? Hated his family with all his heart at the end of chapter 3 and chapter 4 starts after the death of his grandmother, an unexplained leg injury and he is reconciled with the women of his family with no explanation? WTF?

Is, while insectuous, neither of them were married or in a relationship with someone else when they got together...

They were both free and clear and neither lied to someone else (like everyone did to him and her family did to her) nor forced anyone else (like his uncle and grandfather did to his mother and his mother basically did to his sister and definitely did to him) to engage in sex...

But if he really wanted to screw his mother over he could have just given the police the recording of her raping him. Whole story done in one or two chapters instead of four.

would like to have married my brother and had his baby

Last chapter was a bit rushed and confusing. 2nd read. 5 for series

I loved the whole thing until you threw the extended families into the mix. Up until then it was a story about redemption and love. After that it was just a buch of people that fuck. Cause with all Simon went through although he'd be willing to take in his mom , sister , and aunt nobody would be putting them back out there for other dudes to share. Honestly I wish I hadn't read the last chapter

i never read past the first story. it angered me so much that i never even bothered to read it. but after dealing with some things in my life or at least coming to some realizations (nothing even remotely close to the stuff in the story) i decided to read the other 3 chapters after reading some of your other stuff. i got very emotional during the dvd of grandma singing her song. it was nice to know that two people one more broken then the other but still both very hurt could find solace in each other and find some healing in it.

Teenage fantasy. I must admit the story got quite a bit confusing with who was doing who, and when???

That detracted from a fun tale quite a bit

Scores 3/5 because of the unneeded confusion.

Decent story, but way too many errors throughout all 4 chapters. Please get an editor or at least someone to proofread it.

I enjoyed the story but that is the most screwed up town and bunch of characters ever. It would be a real hit as a sitcom. Thank you for writing and posting it.

thanks that has to be the best taboo storie iv ever read

With this cast of characters you showed that a lot of thought was put into your story. Well written and presented.

At first it was all about the revenge, then the story kept drawing you in. Becoming invested in their lives and wondering what will come of this and that. Well written, and always thought provoking.

I love your stories and until this chapter it was no different. Why couldn't you have just left it about love instead of everyone fucking everyone? There was no need to throw in the friends and families. Maybe Brittany except who really wants to fuck a slut that just told him his other two friends where spitroasting her? This chapter sucked. Sorry. It just blew the whole rest of the story.

This series started, imho, badly and I almost didn't read the rest of it but thank you for redeeming Simon and re-uniting him with his mother, sister and aunt. Also, thanks for explaining how Pamela and Amy got tangled up with the Father and Uncle. And I appreciate the ending so that Melody and Paul got their just rewards.

reading the 1. Part again ...

it´s like Part 2-4 are completely different stories...

which makes Part 1 even worse (After the first Part am i supposed to feel anything but disgust für his whore of a mother and the oh so supportive cunt of a sister? not no but hell no buhu dominant males made her do the deed - but wait she divorced him without hesitation... so she could have fought bac and could have behaved like an thinking adult... hmmm - you see my issue?

And the poor sis "sacrificed herself" ... yap no! Not with that cockcrazy nonbrain she possess)

I'm sorry. I understand how difficult it is to write a story this long, and how much effort it takes, and I applaud you for it. But, either English is your second language, or you simply don't understand basic grammar. Not to mention that the story changes radically from the first part to the latter stages, and there's simply no consistent character development. I read the whole thing after thinking that the "hero" would really go out of his way to destroy the whole family, but after the first chapter the whole thing turned into a barely coherent mess. I agree that this site should be about fantasy, but jeez, there should be at least a measure of logic inherent in the story to give it some base and credibility. None of that is contained in this work. Again, I'm sorry to be so blunt.

I think the punishment of Melody and Paul was on the light side. Years earlier, Paul knew Melody was fucking others, including Robert. Why would he be surprised that it continued? Seeing her with Adam and Cody had the mitigating factor of Simon misleading her… so again, not much reason for him to be upset. Showing the video would humiliate them, but Paul and Melody could relocate and start over.

OTOH, Simon has to live in the house for 5 years. Melody could relocate, blackmail Simon for a large sum, and he would be powerless to ignore it.

Then there’s the legality factor. In their state, incest is illegal. Plus he made a video of his group having a gangbang with a women who consented only to sex with Simon. She and Paul could easily turn the video into evidence of rape and conspiracy against Simon, Amy, Cody, Adam, and Brittany.

Fantastic story... Loved it was well worth the time to read from start to finish... 5 Stars... Soul71 is becoming 1 of my favorite Authors... Just amazing...

Really enjoyed the story. I was surprised how much I enjoyed the beginning with the family getting caught and the hate he had for them before getting over it. Wish there was an easy way to find more stories like this.

Sad beautiful loving and great ending

I just wished it was just simon and amy together didn't really care his mom or aunt

The stuff with the transsexual was completely unneeded and takes away from the story. Also, the ending felt very rushed. The motivations of love of the mom, sister and aunt were underexplained imo.

Other than that, interesting story.

good story if a bit long winded.

Misleading title. A Family destroyed? A Father and girlfriend destroyed. Thats it. 2*

I love the story. I have read it in the past and have always loved it. AAAAAA++++++

This is either my third or fourth time reading this,and honestly it gets better every time.But as for the concept that first Simon tore his family to shreads was brutal but highly likely given his devastation.

Next it progressively revealed that Amy and Mom were almost as much victims as Simon was since Pamela was abused and used as nothing more than a cum-dumpster by the men of her family,except Simon.Amy on the other hand lost her brother for 6 years due to Melody,the only one who truly loved her brother deeply and Amy was heartbroken she lost Simon.

Aunt Caroline and Grandma were innocent and so they had no malice directed toward them by Simon.But when Simon came back it seemed Caroline,Pamela,and Amy were gonna tear their family apart again due to jealousy but apparently they learned to appreciate eachother and to share Simon between the three of them.

In the end Simon,Mom,Amy,Caroline,and their new extended family of Cody,Adam,Brittany and Simons kids (almost forgot but Grandma in spirit form) all live happily ever after with lots and lots of sex and love.

Now the only drawback is the lack of clarification about Uncle Robert,Melody,and Paul (or more specifically Dad) and Melody's unborn baby.I wish the author had explained their ultimate outcome,like if Paul had a nervous breakdown after fucking Brittany and ended up in the nuthouse or what.Uncle Robert getting run over by a bus or something as karmic justice.And Melody if she wound up turning tricks as the state whore or what to support herself and her baby.Overall excellent story.

Very long story,a lot of people to keep track of. You need a better proof reader,chapter 3 got hard to read. In all a very creative and well written story giving me hours of pleasure. Not everyone's cup of tea, but its fiction afterall.

The extended family idea at the end ruined it for me. Came out of the blue, felt improvised

I really like your work, but you need a better proofreader. I'm at a loss, for the lost context. I stared at the starred text, upon the screen up on the wall. It's the little things in life that make it good, or great.

Amy was short-changed by the rapist mother and slut aunt. Actually, this was a totally fucked up family!!

10/10!!!!!

ANY story that quotes the late GREAT Leonard Cohen is AWESOME by default!

Story was good. You have way better. Kind of felt like you didn’t care much for this one and just trying to give fans more of a story they wanted. All was pretty good until the end. Other families joining? Glad you didn’t give details because can’t stand hearing I loved you all my life just to for him or her to screw another. Before the why does Simon get more but ladies only him argument, Simon didn’t choose this. The ladies came after him and wanted him to really love them. Now are they giving themselves to the men in these other families? Sounds that way. Oh well. Just explaining why I’m not liking the end. Still good work. Thanks

Payback a bitch, and that bitch was played back, lol.

Loved the story, as I read the story, I kinda imagined/ pictured it in my head as it happened,

it was like watching an tv episode on TV.

Loved it, few spelling mistakes but didn't spoil the reading,

Added to my favourites.

Loved your story keep up the great writing.

Judy appearing in the epilogue really confused me, but other than that I really enjoyed it.

Simon should have destroyed ever member of his family and then forfeited the inheritance by moving away.

Good series. The only distractions to me were you using "lost" instead of "lose" and "your" instead of "you're".

Loved the story. That's all need to say.

Really great story but for the ending. I thought I read somewhere in the story that his mum said she’s 46 and to couldn’t have kids or maybe I read it wrong plus I was hoping if he ended up with anyone and having kids it would be Amy. I thought she was really the only one that deserved Her brother. The aunt and mother his sluts like they requested and nothing more. But hey I still gave you ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ and nice touch with Grandmother’s Ghost at the end…

Hypocrisy was the Base.

So is in the Real World.

Who am I to Judge.

There were many Inconsistencies and Some questions were never answered.

The only question that I have, which one had twins? Due to the mention of the four beds in the hospital nursery. Just wondering. Good story.

Why would anyone ever forgive a sister and a mother like that? The extended family thing at the end was garbage. Caroline was the only remotely likeable character but she stayed married to a guy that just kept cheating on her. Melody was just a run-of-the-mill slut. How could she ever blackmail him without totally exposing her activities? Judy was a dream character and didn't feel real because she was only ever described in flashbacks. Good descriptions of sex but a stupid story.

Could have given a “gay porn” warning.

Lots of negative comments. However, I loved the story, thoroughly enjoyed reading it twice.

I'm a little confued. I get that the characters in the "crossover" are from some other story, I'm just not sure which though...

However, 5 stars on the finale. Expertly written!

Well, that's the first time a story here had me in tears. 5/5. The way you wove the songs into the story, especially the Hallelujah scene. Epic. Surprisingly wholesome.

Truly an amazing story, definitely worth the read.

I have read this story now for the fifth time. One of my all time favorites by one of my all time favorite authors.