All Comments on 'A Father's Justice Pt. 05'

well done.

I am really enjoying this series. Thanks for sharing.

Brilliant chapter. First of all, 5 * from me, will it be a first 5 star all round?

Loved it. Can't wait for the conclusion. Please don't keep us waiting too long!

5 stars keep them coming.

Light and entertaining like an old dime store western novel, great gung - ho fun. Thanks ST always a pleasure.

Righteous!

R.

you know I was hoping you had finished this thing off with this installment. Not that it's not a great story. Just the anticipation on the next installment is eating me alive. Five stars I'd give you more if I could.

Will your other characters make an appearance.

so far so good keep it going please

Kick ass and take names!

5

Another good chapter. So far Ryan solved the mystery(s). Got the bad guys. Saved the family and now has the girl. I guess next chapter Ryan will get some type of reward(s). Hopefully the ex loses everything along with the ahole Jake. Still great so far. Same complaint. Having to wait between chapters is still annoying. Looking forward to the next installment(s). Just don't take so long.

Wow... Elmer underestimated Ryan( and his team.). I know this is listed under "Loving Wives" but so far there hasn't been much loving these last 2 chapters. This has been a roller coaster ride wanting Ryan to save himself and his family( not his ex-wife either). We know this is fiction but it is an interesting story with lots of heartache and anger. Can hardly wait for the last chapter where Ryan confronts his lying ex-wife who deceived him and set him up ( the cell phone she gave him that had a receiver/tracking device built in). Her lust for money and prestige is her downfall and ,now, She will pay the price... Great job at keeping us in suspense, next chapter please

I'm on tenterhooks waiting for the next installment it's a really thrilling story i'll be sorry to see it end.

Good readin'

Plot and pacing remain spot on. Good humor interlaced with character development. I much enjoy your work sir. Thank you.

So good.

good chapter, nice little action sequence.

not gonna lie, had me sweating in the first half, was hoping they wouldn't rape Sarah or they find her mid-rape in the raid.

looking forward to the next chapter.

I still don't buy the idea that the FBI's going to be sitting on its hands after two agents are murdered.

"Maybe it's time you got to know him a little bit better." - It's not like it was Bob's fault that he didn't know him better. Ryan's the one that cut everyone off.

In his normal style, ST has once again entertained us with his tale. It plays out like a movie, including him having a friend that just happens to have an attack helicopter, that the bad guys didn't come running to see when they heard it approaching. (Sorry, but the old Huey's weren't quiet lol)

I enjoyed it and look forward to the next installment! Thanks for sharing.

Rnebular

Looking forward to the wrap-up!!

Looking forward to the next episode.

Great Chapter to an excellent tale and fabulous read. Thanks much for the opportunity to read your story. Looking forward to the story's continuation. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.

I can easily suspend all disbelief except for the FBI standing down with two dead agents. That’s too absurd but it’s still an awesome little piece of escapism

I understand how some authors don't leave a category once started but just about all of these are not a LW type story. Its a great series that I truly enjoy but this is more non erotic action type yarn.

If there is a Pt. 06 coming I will read that as well

Well done!

Another home run another of the best you will find. Can’t wait for the next one

Very good!

I'll suspend reality that the Huey and mini gun were available, as well as a qualified gunner. Other than that, I was a wee bit surprised they went up against AKs with a .45 caliber handgun.

I'm not certain you deliberately planned the M134 as a distraction, but it worked, and enabled the ground team covered entry.

The only thing I saw missing, was how the van had sensors to see vehicles, etc. NVGs won't usually work for that and certainly won't work remotely. You can, but not low cost. Thermal, UV projectors and sensors, light enhancers, and radar can be normal special ops support.

Also, drones are heavily used. Their capabilities are really good now, offensively, marking, and as sensors. Pocket drones are common, now.

Well done but you might want a SOF advisor.

I believe your placing charges on the tree bases was to make an Abatis. Normally, Engineers are trained to take down at least six trees, at angles, across a road. It creates an obstacle even tanks have a challenge crossing.

Nice to see it being used.

My comments would mirror those by AmunRa218. Great story though.

@Vinastoda this is what I call realistic fiction. It's totally unbelievable, but ST keeps his internal logic, mostly, intact.

Jethro Tull - Crossfire

Written about the ending of the Iranian Embassy siege by the SAS in 1980.

Their assault became the iconic image of the SAS in the latter end of the 20th century.

1 noted error, telling the sheriff they were leaving at 1100 hours. It was distracting as I was thinking they were trying to put the sheriff off rather than recruit him.

Overall typical excellent over the top ST thanks.

Justice served. I was hoping the guards at the camp would have been shot and then the rest executed after they knew who was doing it and why. Only Elmer died that way. Catch them with their pants down literally. still 5 stars

I think I mentioned it in an earlier comment on different chapter, but maybe not... Where's Beverly's son at? You mention she had a son, then he never comes up again as the story unfolds? I can't wait for the next chapter!

Good story,but having got rid of the bad guys,I am curious to what he will do next apart from getting married.

I think this story is a good basis for a book and possibly a movie. You can expand on his consulting adventures and his wife's betrayal how she stated and such.

Excellent story. Well done.

Well I knew there would be more to Bob/Gunner than earlier mentioned. But I cannot see Smith as clueless as depicted being an ex-SEAL - just no way. But it will be good to have FBI Smith steering the compound investigation away form TX, I'm sure drugs will be found on the site. But a MISS, fly a Huey near/over Ft Bliss/El Paso would glow on the FAA/Mil RADAR and then to see the Huey loiter over the compound site will be hard hide, even for FBI Smith. Plus the RADAR has tracking bearings and possible set down locations.

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I see the next chapter as a get even with the remaining Board members and EX-wife.

/

Still a 4.75*. Hooyah, salute....

As usual , Tramp excels in his story-telling abilities ! Carry on Sir .

This is definitely one of the best stories I have ever read. Even better than old what's-his-name King. This story should be on the bestseller list.

I am with Vin and boyd. 5* for a truly good story

Great chapter with lots of action. I could see this made into a movie for Stallone, Schwarzenegger, and other old action stars. My only quibble is that Elmer didn't suffer enough before he ended him. Waiting now for a final confrontation with Lisa, and the finale for Jake and his goons. Greatnstory, keep them coming.

When are you going to finish this story so I can read it. I never read a story until it is complete no matter how long. A little hint please.

some of your best work... more please

WOW.... no survivors.... that'd be a good thing, like something I'd have done. Now, lets see what happens with Smith and the rest of the crew. Bob, Sarah and little Ryan have some recovering to do, but not anything that bad...... can't wait to see how it plays out....

Waiting for the next installment.

One of the best and most entertaining stories I've read in a long while. Thank you for sharing. Looking forward to the next chapter.

You left political commentary OUT. Shows you can tell a good story without opinions.

Great story and i REALLY like how you put the last few paragraphs of the previous part in the beginning.

I have always heard two versions of revenge. 1) Revenge is sweet. 2) Revenge is best served cold. I would venture a third version, that I have developed in my 65 years on this planet. Revenge may, or may not be sweet, but it is still revenge.

Absolutely love this story. 5 stars all the way so far.

Appreciate the story and will look forward to a sequel if any.

Working nicely.

Based solely on reading a few comments here I am looking forward to reading this but I want to wait till its finished. Can you give an idea of how many chapters you are expecting this to be total?

5* Superior Writing if somewhat farfetched. The Huey was a nice touch. There are a ton of privately owned military hardware out there. An old M48 tank or M113 APC attacking the scum would have been nice too. Write On!

ST, you always write interesting stories. Please continue.

but I appreciate the effort.

Thanks.

Great story, and can't wait till the next chapter.

Great read. I see the technical gurus are out and leaving comments They just wont take the hint that this is Saddletramps fantasy and his universe where things happen, radars work and just plain shit happens as he describes. If y'all have a problem with that write down your fantasy and I'll be glad to critique it!

5 stars for me and looking forward to the next installment.

Cheers

SAGE

Good story with happy with (surprise) happy ending. What else could be brewing?

... There are two more parts to the story. I had originally planned on ending it with part 6, but it took on a life of its own and I didn't want to rush the ending. Both parts have already been submitted and hopefully will be published soon. Thank you for the votes and the positive comments. I appreciate them all a bunch!

Just loving this series, it has been, is being great fun. I just read below there is to be two more parts to this tale, I cannot wait for them. Thank you Saddletramp.

Scores a resounding 5/5 again.

Your stories like this makes me recall the great comic books of my youth !

Everything from Jonah Hex to Sgt Rock , and I mean that as a complement .

Keep 'em coming !

Have thoroughly enjoyed this series and this one too!!!! More tall tales please!!!

ANOTHER BIG THANKS TO A VERY GOOD AUTHOR.

I like to think I have an imagination as vivid as yours, but I also know that I have absolutely no writing ability and couldn’t begin to create a dialog. You have the gift so please continue. Looking forward to the next instalments on this story and any future tales. Five stars without a doubt.

That was just plain fun!

5 *****

Seriously, why bother writing this ridiculous garbage.

Ryan: okay. You can come along.

[a while later]

Agent Smith: Why do I need gloves?

Ryan: Finger prints.

Ummm... duh! Even without fingerprints being a problem, everyone in the last 20-25 years uses gloves during the active combat phase of an operation. Wearing gloves was a given. In fact it would have been a question if Smith were told not to wear gloves. And, considering he’s an FBI field special agent, Smith would know more (and be thinking about) about leaving fingerprints than a combat SOG veteran.

Also, Nam era Hueys, even for helicopters, were notoriously loud. Might have been interesting if they’d been able to retrofit the newer quieter angled-end blades, or the Navy 4-blade rotors. Being it seems as if it were a bit of a black job, so not needing FAA certification (why have minigun mounts?) it would have been an interesting technical twist to add. And would make the attack on the corporate retreat safer.

I mean, since Elmer paid previously for a black operations level assassination attempt on Ryan, he seems to have the right contacts (and money) to have high military grade security/protection, and not just a very very good commercial level of security that they seemed to have on hand. Someone of the prior experience would have been listening and planning for a possible helo approach, if not from financially “poor” Ryan, then certainly from the FBI. Two FBI agents were killed. The FBI might not act quickly, but at some point they WERE going to act.

Might have been nice to have Agent Smith part of FBI HRT, so he’d have kept his “qualifications” current.

Be careful when writing your badass characters that you don't force everyone around them to be idiots just to make a main character look good. I was a bit aggravating to see Ryan lecturing veteran FBI agent Smith on forensic issues like fingerprints and gunpowder residue. I always think that the writing's stronger when each of the characters get to show their strengths.

This was absolutely the best story I've ever read on Literotica.

You should really consider writing screen plays for movies and television!

Couldn’t wait for this to post. Thanks.

Outstanding.

Outstanding Story. Keep them coming!

...bit better. Almost there.

Awesome justice...

Justice is served!

Looking forward to seeing those loose ends tied-up. This is a very enjoyable series. I like it when people who think they’re better than everyone else, are taken down.

Justice is served. But where do we go from here?

Very satisfying chapter, as many others have pointed out. Just about the AK 47. You refer to the rounds fired with them as "hot lead", which would implicate the use of commercial ammunation, which is perfectly acceptable in the context of your story. But if those mercenaries had access to Soviet/ Russian standard supersonic military ammunition we would talk about composite- bullets with just some lead in them. The ammunition has evolved since it was introduced, but much of it consists of a copper plated steel jacket, some lead and a steel core. The latter was made from soft iron early on, later tempered carbon steel was used, nowadays hardened tool steel. Just fyi.

Looking forward to the next chapter; read the whole series before, but am not shure how it continues.

My Daughter lied in court against Me .So That Day She Died as far as I am Concerned . It was funny that She wanted Me to pay for her wedding but have her Stepfather walk her down the aisle . Needless to say I did not pay for the wedding nor did I go to it . After She lied I made sure not to see her again when She had a Son She named Him after her Stepfather

Great story holy crap that was intense looking forward to more thanks for posting this.

Really loving the story so far, have to say though. Crossbows are nowhere close to silent

There was the action I was waiting for. I am do happy you didn't write that Sarah was gangbanger. Although, I took Elmer as a pretty, evil, vindictive type that would have raped Sarah on the plane on the way to the retreat.

Also there are listening to the scanner, making sure the cops aren't on to them, Yet they don't bother to stash the guns they used off the property. In case they show up.

I would also think that Ryan would have to kill all of the board of directors, to make sure his family was safe. They were all involved in the gsngbang of Lisa. They probably all have their hands dirty in company business.

Elmer's death should have been incredibly gruesome. So bad as to make the readers stomach turn. But there wasn't time in the scene, damn it.

Anyways, another great chapter in this story. I'm really enjoying it.

that was fun!...

brill

Heard

Understood

Reacted

ACCOMPLISHED!

It’s your world and your fantasy story. Only it’s far out and science friction

So good!

It totally makes the story, but....Ranger "speak" is a LOT shorter. This so the readers understand, yes? "Left. 'head nod' and I'm not watching that part of the world now. Ranger speak. For those who do not appreciate the lower echelons of society, these guys make it so YOU sleep at night. And they do it with two word sentences for the most part. sleep well, America. And bless this writer who explains too much.

Great story! Real action, fast paced, tight storyline.

On to the next chapter!

This story has it all . . . and can you believe it? Good old fashioned love/sex. Great job, Author!

Good job, no, GREAT JOB!

SaddleTramp You Sir are the Greatest! If I had half of your talent I could Rival "Clive Cussler" or "Ian Fleming" but I don't. I am a long way from your talent and ability. Thank You so much for all that you do writing for us Fans. Thank You for such Great Stories where the good guy wins in the end and the bad guy meets his reward. 10 stars for a great story. I love a happy ending!

I love this series. Good work

I loved it. Nice action sequence. Like others mentioned I too was worried that the team would find Sarah being raped and gang banged, or in the middle of it. I also felt Elmer didn't die a gruesome enough death, as he deserved more.

I gave it 5 big stars for the story itself, 5 stars for the action, and 5 more stars for the love story sub plot that only ST56 could have pulled off. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Still going strong for a shoot up story

The bitch egg lady is so desperate.....obviously his daughter and grandson get priority....stupid cunt

This series would make an excellent movie. Ryan’s character reminds me of congressman Dan Crenshaw. Way cool how Ryan included his son-in-law and future bride in the rescue. Love the egg lady.

He cut the MF head off! OFS!!

BLOODY LOVED THIS CHAPTER!!!!!

I've never done what I'm about to, but a point needs to be made on the following comment-see below.

"Anonymous5 days ago

The bitch egg lady is so desperate.....obviously his daughter and grandson get priority....stupid cunt"

Mr, you are one of the most cruelly insensitive person I've run into in, thankfully, a long time. I pity you the personal hell that you live within yourself.

Please, relegate this commentary to another writer. Well, actually to no one.

None of us who like ST work appreciate your mindset and, while you have a right to your opinion, it is my opinion you should seek life elsewhere. May God find a way to help you from your darkness.

Ol’ Saddletramp had to revisit this series after reading your newest one, realized I had missed this and remaining chapter, and pleased to say you are my favorite storyteller on Literotica - maybe anywhere! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Even as sappy as the story is, I enjoyed it ever so much. Glad that things have worked out so far but there are still some loose ends that need to be titted up a bit, like the rest of the board that was in on the gang bangs, unless they were all eliminated at the retreat. Guess this story just kinds of grows on me so I gave it a 5.