All Comments on 'A Game with Benefits'

Unfortunately your grammar let you down and got worse as the story progressed. You repeatedly used 'of' instead of 'off' plus 'cloths' instead of 'clothes' and also added words that should not have been included.

Find someone to edit your stories before you send them and I am sure it will help.

of something like this happening, but I agree with the first comment, it was kind of hard to get into it with the grammar mistakes, however, I do look forward to more. :)

I liked the idea of someone being restrained and forced to do something that they can't control. But in a way they want it done. The story line is good. So keep the dares/ position coming.

I LOVE lesbian slave girl stories - hottest scenes are those in which the slave girl is naked while her owners are clothed...so thanks, very hot. (A minor comment only: the few typos are distracting, please use spellcheck)! Above all, write more!

A good start to blackmail and control. Keep up the writing. Thanks.

Spell check: clothes

Forget about the grammar mistakes!!! You have a Wonderful imagination and an art for story-telling. Grammar will come along as you keep telling your stories. I SURE WISH IT WAS A LONGER STORY. I can't wait to see what YOUR imagination has in store for the young Lady that WANTS TO BE USED, But doesn't know it for sure... YET!!! MORE.... PLEASE