All Comments on 'A Gift From His Father Ch. 15'

I think you should upload new parts sooner

Great story the twists keep coming ( excuse the pun). I love how Mary and Jackie spent so much time together maybe a new parntership (wink) What's going to happen to Candance, she's been naughty with her hypnotic power. LOve reading and can't wiat for the next chapter.

I remember a few of the women, well really few, Due to the length of time between chapters and trying to recall w/o going back to reread previous chapters, I wish you'd put a list of all the women ,... I have enjoyed the story but with my yrs on pain meds for spinal cord messed up, I cant just recall them all w/o a small reminder. just like typing this took15 min to type. Even if you send me a list I can copy it to desktop and have it open when I read , I can get a quick reminder who they are. I do love the story tho great job.ty/ bill

I went back to chapter 12 and reread from there. Still did not reconise some of the characters. I agree with Billyjim about a list of characters with a bio. I do love the story and all the twist and turns Thank you

Thanks for the feedback. I have to admit that this story has taken on a life of its own. My outline and list of characters are growing. I have to go back and read many chapters to make certain I am accurate. Mary and Jackie are as you've noticed dealing with the "other woman syndrome". Candace isn't working very hard and is about to ...(well I let you find out in Chapter 16).

I would like to write more and post more often, but I have a family to support and this is not a paying gig, I write when I have time, but will try to put some extra time into it, because you asked.

No promises, but will try to have the next installment posted before the end of this short month of February..

Thanks for keeping the story going. It's one of the top stories on the site.

I look forward to reading many more chapters. Keep up the good work!

Thanks again, your efforts are appreciated by many readers here.

This has by far been my favorite series and I find myself checking weekly for the next update. Thank you and please keep up the great work

One of the best on the site. I, also, will be checking for the next installment.

Great story, please continue with it as there is more to tell and I would enjoy reading the rest

I have posted Chapter 16 on the site and expect that it will be published by Friday. I have already started on Chapter 17, I am not sure where these characters are taking us, but I am having fun with it, I hope you enjoy.

BTW: I assume that I am writing for a male audience, I am curious if women are reading this story too.

the last line of this chapter has to be my very favorite so far. if i had been drinking a coke it would have exited out my nose!

How is she not in trouble? Did John just not notice?

it was the way she did it to mark that was the problem she made it were he wanted to fuck just her so she would have a boy toy Mary did not do that with Jackie

Hello,

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I'm enjoying all of it.

Still wondering how John dealt with the banker.

Bringing financial doom to families and skimming johns finances calls for creative punishment. I missed that.

Well

Thanks again

You really need to get an editor just to smooth out some of the easy things.

First of all stop changing from Cindy to Cynthia, as the first time that I saw it, I didn’t know who the character was.

A whimsical orgy, ... awkward inconsistencies, guest should have been pleural, guests, and a number of other similar typos, some that really messed with the story's flow. But still a fun chapter, ... thanks! ... ;-) TTFN

First of all, thank you very much for taking your time and effort into writing for us. This wonderful story! I am thoroughly enjoying each of the characters and the storyline, as well as the twists that you add to it.

I know it has been nine years since you wrote the story, but I have a suggestion if you are still here. Could you add a final chapter that gives a shorts two or three sentence description of each of the characters that we can use as a reference while reading? I noticed in one of your comments that you have to go back and read for continuity about the characters, and it would help immensely if we had an index of characters to be able to do the same.

Again, thank you for taking your valuable time for sharing such a wonderful story with all of us.

Sincerely

Daniel