All Comments on 'A Gift From His Father Ch. 16'

ahh hell just as we get past all the multi partnered sex and finally get to the interesting meat of the ring,, we have to wait another month to find out how john is and the who and why, thgen how he recovers thru this stage. god I wish there were 8 pages instead of only the 4. grr.. Great job, I do love the whole story. I just wish I had a crib sheet to glance at and remember all the individuals and who they were. ( problem of too many pain meds dulls the recall) ty, for a story that so captivates me that my mind forgets the sever nerve pain while Im in the story/ bil

Here is a request that would help us readers keep track of who is who in the stories...

The author of "The Morrisons" has a running Character list at the end of his stories, you might want to start doing the same thing starting with your next story, maybe with a brief synopsis of who each character is.

Still great story series, cannot wait for the next chapter. Obviously he gets the Popeye treatment from his agents to revive him, but what happens after that and whether it is enough to overcome Chance Goodwin and Elizabeth is another issue and one I will be looking forward to reading about.

Who cares how long it takes for the next chapter to come out,as long that the story continues fine by me

I've realy enjoyed the story so far! I was alittle worried in the earlier chtrs that it was going to be just about the sex, but the plot got more and more interesting as the chptrs progrest! I wonder how John is going to get out of this mess! Keep up the gr8 work!!!!!!!

I loved the story so far. There are a few things that I think it could have done without. Particularly the extreme excess of lesbian scenes that seems to come in spurts. But I hated the last part of this chapter completely. By now John can smell intent a mile away. To be fooled by Elizabeth for so long and not sense the betrayal intent from both her and Chance doesn't make any sense at all. It completely contradicts his developed abilities at this stage.

Please continue this story,but please hurry the soonier the bettter!!!!

Great story! Can't wait for the next chapter.

But you're so far off base about the Fox network that I doubt you've ever watched it for longer than 3 minutes. I can only assume that you've been brainwashed by (P)MSNBC, the Daily KOS, or some other extreme left wing kool aid dispensing website. Fox is not the one who has to print retractions, corrections, and apologies on a near-daily basis.... it is your left wing smear sites who do. You desperately need to get some facts straight.

this is my second read trough and still as great as the first time

I enjoyed 98% of this story...

Until the author decided to get political. I don't agree with every thing FOX says... but I do a thing they are better then other news souses. I don't like my erotica ejected with the authors political point of view.

Next time leave this stuff out of your story.

Anonymous has no balls in not letting you know who he is. A political point of view did not hurt this story in the slightest!

Awesome story keep up the good work.

I agree with anonymous about your cheap shot about FOX news. Typical liberal that thinks everyone must agree with their point of view. It's OK for them to give only the leftist view but to give an opposing view is anathema to them. Well, the dems are in charge now so you can expect higher unemployment and taxes. You reap what you sow. And the guy dissing FOX has the syntax of a dyslexic high school dropout. Cree Galt

I find it interesting that someone who can't even get through one page without at least a dozen misspelled words and painfully butchered syntax would have the nerve to sneak in a cheap shot about FOX News. Whether you agree with them or not, at least they don't mangle the English language. One*. (That's a miniature star). Cree Galt

Another interesting story twist, Chance and Elizabeth getting together to betray John, ... so much to learn from all this, ... and what will the extremely loyal Denise do to help John? Or can she do anything? Good thing that the weather is so nice, ... ;-) TTFN

Oh, and along with all the mistaken words and especially the tenses that were completely mangled up, ... the far-Left nonsense regarding Fox News was almost enough to cause me to drop this story, ... almost... But I did remove it from my favorites list though, ... ;-) TTFN

This story absolutely needs an editor to fix all the grammar, misspellings, wrong syntax, etc. Also, it is so too bad to learn this author is a liberal leftist. Must be one of those guys who believes in abortion up to the last minute when the cord is cut, or is happy that gas prices have almost doubled, and everything costs wise have gone up 20%. Just lovely.

The story is about a teenager who has suddenly had a role thrust upon him with no preparation or guidance. He's going to make mistakes. His companions are in the same position. It does need editing, but not enough to get in the way of a good story.

Anyone butthurt and posting ad hominem attacks on the author because he criticised the propaganda factory that is FoxNews, and repeating so many of their proven lies isn't much of a loss.

It seems that the author hasn't posted anyting since 2020. I hope that he is well and just taking a rest from writing.