All Comments on 'A God Still Loves His Princess'

Ugh ... so short!

Eh, wish he hadn't just sat in a shitty hotel. He was treated like garbage and after a certain point he should have left. There's only so much disrespect that anyone should take.

Good story!

5

Wow! A great addition to a great story. I didn't even miss the sex! Just sayin'! Looking forward to the next episode.

Cheers

SAGE

I was happy with the original being a one off. Now I'm ecstatic it's not. Thank you for the great work and I very much look forward to the next part(s).

Looking forward to the next chapter!! Well done, thrilling tale.

didn't do it for me at all.

Make him a hero once, okay.

A second time it gets really heavy.

But doing it all over again is ridiculous.

Even Disney never dared to do it, whereas since they bought all the franchises, they produce shit.

In addition the guy has been drinking, he is unarmed, unequipped, unconscious... but is going to liquidate a group of terrorists.

I love both the original story & this sequel. I also enjoyed many of the other stories you have written. Please keep up the good work

Very fun read. Waiting for next chapter!

Different chapter, same story. Very boring. Nothing happened and nothing changed.

This is yet another great story sequence from you. Looking forward to more. Thank you.

A great sequel, looking forward to the next chapter

I can't help but laugh when people say he or she can't be this much of a hero or whatever. These are fictional stories people get over it already. I hold to saddletramp's ethos of it's my world and anything can happen

Mmmm… more to come… noice! Great story. Looking forward to more. Thank-you!

Great story. It feels like this story line has legs. Can I suggest you start numbering the chapters to make determining the reading order easier. I hope there are enough chapters to make that worth while. Thanks

Another good action sequel, so what's next?

Not bad but a total fallacy, since it was already on TV the police presents would have been FULL. Each stairwell would have had a SWAT team in it, ready to take initiative if a clear opening was spotted. Thor would not have got past them to be a hero again. In Thor's future training I hope it teaches him situational awareness and contingencies.

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Putting him up into a fee-bag shithole was done out of malice and contempt - that person needs to be called up short by his short hairs. Taking one for the team was BS and needs to be called out - we are Yanks/cowboys and already kicked there asses to get our freedoms. Just like gray hair tubbo should be called out and reminded if it wasn't for Yanks they would be speaking German just like the French.

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4.5*, Hooyah, Salutes....

Was it over the top and unrealistic? Who cares -great stuff! 5*

Great story. 5*. Hope it continues!

Certainly waiting for part 3! 5*

Ah, some villains are scheming in the darkness with the devil. Will the Hero Thor become the Killing Machine and protect his beloved Princess' Family? Will he again be framed as the Master Mind behind the plot? Will Mr. Carlton discover who the real master mind is and thwart his next attempt? Stay tuned for the next Chapter of a Great 5 star story to find out!

(That comment title probably gives my age away.)

I suppose you are trying to be cute, BH. IMO, this cliff-hanger nonsense is beneath you. There are too many other good stories on Lit to waste any time sitting on the edge of my chair despite your noticeable skills as a writer.

Nice action packed sequel BTW.

Keep 'em comin'.

Loved it ,but the cliff-hanger sucked enough to knock the story from a 5 to a 4.

Great story. Can’t wait for the next chapter.

You're an excellent storyteller, and I look forward to your next chapter.

Needs a better ending.

It sounds like there’s another chapter here. Any comments on the title?

Guys, it’s a silly far-fetched lark, a farce. He’s having fun writing it. He’ll write more if it’s fun.

Why do you just put up one or two chapters and then leave us in baited breath For fks sake finish the story

Please keep going with this story. Great to read something a little bit different than the same old subjects.

More please!

⭐⭐⭐

Your on a roll. Keep it going. There has to be much more to this story. Keep it going.

Based on what I have read so far of your stories especially this one of the love story between Andrew and Princess Jennifer, the storylines are excellent, well thought out and very well written. I hope to see more of this series real soon.

My only suggestion is that the Princess series be show together as a series so they are read in the proper sequence. Well done. 5/5

This way this ended I am hoping there is a sequel in the works.

I enjoyed this, though it was short and seemed to end without an ending. I really hope additional chapters will be coming along. Thank you!

I would love an ending.

She smirked and news of my tirade must have spread.

"Mr. Carlton, I hope you find your accommodations...satisfactory," he said with a smirk.

He smirked, "Well, Her Majesty would consider it a personal favor if you could help keep her grandchild safe, and it's never been a bad thing to be on Her Majesty's good side, if you understand my meaning, Sir.”

"Sounds like there may be another chapter,” I smirked.

Not a complete ending. Hoping this means another chapter will be shared. Thank you!

Have you written the next chapter yet, We're waiting.🤔

Still waiting on the next chapter please?

No next chapter? They get married and have 5 children and live happily ever after.

Rolling along nicely

I'm a little confused how security changed their minds about him after he had already passed a very strict security check at Christmas.

More? and fire Quinn or allow him to retire. Absolutely no reason to stop his security clearance and house him in a dumpy hotel because some talking head on TV makes a crazy accusation.

Good yarn, very enjoyable and put together with one glaring problem. As with so many other writers on this site, the term "smirk" is waaay overused, and mostly with the wrong intent. The definition of the word is "smile in an irritatingly smug, conceited, or silly way", and I believe that many today believe it to simply mean "smile". Taken in context throughout this story, the word is used in cases where it was obvious that the author meant only "smile", or "grin". So, good job, and thanks for the entertainment, but please, lose the fucking "smirks".

The pretext that he was suspected of being part of what he saved people from had no basis at all and made no sense. Stashing the boyfriend of the princess in a scuzzy fleabag hotel made even less sense.

Makes little common sense...really flawed logic train... Love the metanarrative...but this one is more of an outline rather than a fully fleshed out tale... In short spend a little more time on it and get some good editors who will focus upon concept, follow through, critique, and add ideas.

It'll take a year for the Princess's leg to be back at 100%? Really? With the best surgeon and physical therapists money can buy? Plus, for a simple fracture, and nothing here says it was otherwise, it should NOT take that long. I know it's not reality, but seriously...

The MC, while brave, otherwise behaves like a 5 yo having a temper tantrum.

A year for the fracture to heal. Pal, it takes about 6 weeks to functional. Once the leg is splinted, these are metal. Can be removed to attend to the wound and are as strong as a cast, it's on to PT which could done in Buckingham Palace. Three months max and she will be right as the mail.

My point here is please do some homework, I recommend Todd 172 and Saddletramp.

This was not as good as the first chapter. Confused why the hostage crisis is going on for well over an hour or more, and all the police are doing is keeping people back. Where is the RPS? Sad to see Anne was killed. Liked her. Meanwhile he easily slips the police cordon and rushes into the hospital. Wow UK security must suck. Wouldn't they already have snipers in place? And yes he was stupid for rushing in. Knowing the real reason for the "terrorists" in this trilogy, this does appear to be a copycat ransom attempt as the target is Jennifer, not her son. His valorous rescue of Jennifer and the hostages could have easily ended badly. He got lucky and the four gunmen were poorly trained. He might have caught the first one off guard, but the other three seem implausible and rhe second one had to be taken out with little to no noise. Good luck with that. Finally, while I understand security protocol and a need to investigate Andrew and take him away from Jennifer, why in the nine realms (Yggdrassil) was he put into a shitry fleabag hotel? That makes zero sense. And yet, after such a harrowing new incident on the princess' life, he goes into a surly tirade about the crappy conditions. What does makes sense is him being pissed that he is being held like a prisoner and how long it will last. Providing "protection" for him in that terrible hotel makes no sense. And yet he came off as juvenile again. I would be pissed about how long this shit will last and what is going on and how is Jennifer. Not the crappiness of the accommodations. Makes him look immature. Maybe that was done on purpose for inscrutable reasons?

This story has great potential but, for God's sake, don't wreck it with really foolish moves; it almost seems you have a good story that you turned over to a high school student to sort of 'fill in the blanks" as they'd like to see it. Specifically, giving ANY credence ti rational accusations of the nut in the wheel chair is simply stupid and I fully intend that. That the head of the Families protection team would treat the MC as a suspect AFTER he vetted him AND after the MC had put his life at risk, twice, to protect Jen, is idiotic. Likewise, stashing him in that shit hotel make no rational sense. No mention as to why the wheel chair guy wasn't taken into custody and interrogated till he croaked.

This was a good story, rich in promise, that was thrown in the trash. This is sad because it had, at it's frame, the quality of one of Todd 172s story.

Last, please do your homework on the medical issue's. It's a totally unnecessary oversight that bespeaks lazy writing.

Again, look how Saddletramp and Todd 172 do their background research.

I'm taking the time to highlight these errors because I really believe you have the ability to write upto the quality of the two authors I mention. A proof reader would have stopped you from committing all of the foolish errors I noted.

PLEASE, your story has to be reasonable in our eyes and you can never afford to take away the option for the reader to willingly suspend their disbelief.

Please do better!

There's only one word to describe this... Awful!

This story had great potential. When the writer subverted his own story baffles me; whole sections seemed to have a stamp that said, "This totally unbelievable portion was added to wreck the story".

I know the writers here are not getting paid buy having just a friend reading it critically would have shown the writer these flaws. So easy to have corrected.

BH76 Great story .... Looking forward to the next installment and HOPE this is not the end!

Outstanding! Great storyline, continuing... thank you!