All Comments on 'A Grind And Then Some Ch. 04-05'

You really need to work with an editor!<br><br>

"Thrusted"? It's just "thrust" (That's just one of many ghastly blunders)<br><br>

Please, you have good stories - work with someone on editing and improving your writing.

I love your stories, but your spelling and grammer really suck... I still rated you at a 4 though... I have to ask if English is your second language??? There are many editors here on Literotica that could really help your stories out and a good spelling checker would make a world of difference... Hell, I would go over your stories for you before you published them if you would like... Will send you a private message and give you my e-mail if you would like to do that...

just a load of pathetic boring shite garbage ...not remotely entertaining or sexy...just pure dross