All Comments on 'A Hero's Story Ch. 01-03'

I gave this story a two. It's purely ameteurish. The uncanny author of this story doesn't know the vernacular of his time period, which was probably somewhere around the middle ages. At the beggining, when the protagonist wakes up, he says something like, "Mom, give me a sec." I nearly laughed. "Sec," is a term that isn't very old so it shouldn't exist in the story. Also, the protagonist's mother mentions his school, which would be better called an apprenticship. Out of period vernacular wasn't this story's only problem. The dialouge was poor and the characters seemed trite. To get an idea of what a better story from this period should sound like. Read the story "Dungeon Mater," written by me no less. Ta-ta.

I think you should have put this story under sci-fi its in the Knight and dragon era.

Pat