All Comments on 'A Hill Runner & A Hill Walker Ch. 01'

Showed promise, but lost momentum each time it jumped between past and present. Left me feeling dissatisfied at the end, so only three stars.

First, the ending was very abrupt.

Second, you switch back and forth between first-person POV ("I boffed Carol...") and Third-person POV ("He/Andy boffed Carol...").

Thank you for your feedback.

As a very new writer each story is very much an experiment which I can only learn from fully when I receive feedback.

As for the sudden end - well if the story is reasonably well received I am intending another two or three parts. The next answering the question as to why Carol chose Andy, amongst other things. Two clues on this - no she is not a nympho slut, just a girl with a healthy appetite and two it's not because his phallos is super exceptionally long or thick.

Looking forward to seeing where it goes in the next chapter