All Comments on 'A Hole Between Rooms Ch. 01'

Bedroom in the basement but woke up with the sun in his eyes?

This story has potential, let's hope it gets better.

Get an editor, learn to spell, use a spellchecker.

What kind of abrupt ending is that. U play this up to be an incest story but absolutely nothing happens.

his father and sister having sex and the virgin will always masturbate, I don't understand what the author has in mind to write the same story, when he discovers what's happening and just accepts it and that's it, I swear I'll bomb the author who copies stories from others and doesn't make any changes

No ending to the story?

Sorry, first comment is a chritism.

I think proper spelling and grammar requires a story name change. Its not " An hole" It should be "A Hole".

Sorry, now ill read the sorry.😁

And?

Good start

Can’t wait for the next chapter.

Great start

Where is the rest of the story? It ended without an ending. Hope there is a part 2. If so it should have been ready.

OK for the first try, I'm going to give you a four for effort, though I would like to see a little more action. After all, I'm looking for something to trigger my lust. Your fantasy did not quite do that for me. As incest is my favorite topic, specifically father/daughter, brother/sister with a lot of other scenarios. I will wait for your next fantasy installment.

Lust4Sure

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Sad that's where it ends, was really enjoying it, hopefully there's more to it at some point!

Nice. But I hope there’s more. You haven’t indicated if this is part of a series or is to be continued.

We need more

More, please.

So? So What? When does the good stuff start? I like your style, I like your narrative. But this is not yet a story.

Copy and pasted from Reddit.

I almost didn't read the story because of the grammar error in the title. Now, I'm kind of disappointed I did. It didn't get better in that aspect, nor did it tell me a story - you just described some scenes in your life that by this point had not led to anything interesting.

No story here

Your grammar is atrocious! In the fourth paragraph you write, "The layout is Eve and I's bedrooms..." I's is not a word! It should read, "The layout is Eve's and my bedrooms..." I'd like to say you write like a second grader with a dirty mind, but there is no evidence of a dirty mind here.

Anonymous your grammar correction was incorrect eve and I was correct not eve and me so your grammar is atrocious and I know how to punctuate I just don't care