All Comments on 'A Hotel Error Pt. 01'

Absolutely love the direction of Eric & his mom (Ms., Davis) of the accidental incest in Hotel Error novella and more developing feelings of their relationship as they opened Pandora 's Box. As mother & son working backwards in this ongoing mistaken sex shenanigans at the hotel and going forward at the meantime.

Continue on

Catch Ya later

Cheers!

Very solid. I love the slow burn. I hope you make their official first time special

Great job! Very hot

5 star story!!!!! The only real mistake I saw was a place where you wrote disguised instead of disgusted. Excellent!!!!! Can't wait for Pt. 02...

More please

5 .... 5 ..... 5 ...... 5

For bragging rights, can anyone point out the tie in?

Awesome. Thanks

I’m confused. Isn’t George his dad? How did he have 6 affairs and marry the sixth one? Why make them sleep in separate beds? That’s too easy, she should be in love with George and then woke up having sex with her son.

That would have fueled cheating, lust and love fantasies.

Started out well but your writing quality quickly broke down. Get an editor please. Or do a better job yourself. You don't, need, so, many, commas.

Very good!

Really good. I hope for much more.

Thank you.

Want to see what else Sally had to say ro Sandra in the online forum.

Of course, want to see Eric & Sandra go at it full force.

Commas are cool (a previously comment), “your” instead of “you’re” is not,

Still a resounding 5⭐️.

I liked the story, but I always find it amusing how prudish Americans are about family members seeing each other in anything other than a full state of dress. :)

excellent

Great story. Looking forward to the next installment

Good writing and story telling. Thx!

A solid 5 for sure. Well done. I enjoyed the build up.

A rare perfect story.

The past tense of lie is lay, not laid. It's not just you , but so many authors here make the same mistake.

Loved it! Five stars and a favorite point!

The old 'only one bed' hotel screw up trope. Vernacular obviously UK.