All Comments on 'A Hotwife's Double-Date'

I'm relatively new here, so can someone tell me the difference between a hotwife and a whore? Her actions seem to your baby lines that there might be.

Would love to see my wife used like that. !!!!

At all as you can see. Next time she goes there it will be alone because she will be on the clock for hef new job as a independant escort.. and her ex is now screwing up another woman's life.

A night to remember. Michael a gentleman should unzip his wife's dress for their guests. Didn't you want to participate

Great story ... as usual some readers should go read more romance stories without sex.

In our real life we did some group sex and that's no reason my wife became an escort after it !

But in the "Literotica fictive world" I would love to see Lauren slowly becoming a whore in the next chapter.

5 stars

Why just give it away.

Nice work, and you braved the HW category knowing the sourpuss trolls would pounce. Ignore them. They profess to hate the wife sharing stories but they're always here to complain. I think they jack off and feel guilty.

Criticisms: Did I miss something? They were in a club and then in the next paragraph getting down to business in someone's apartment.

Don't use passive 'ing' verbs. Those are called intransitive verbs and they don't have a verb object. Use action verbs that denote action against a noun. Much stronger.

Avoid weasel words: nearly, almost, just, while, as, always and more I can't think of right now. Most people talk in weasel words nowadays. Eschew it.

A newby hotwife went from zero to fucking two guys in one night, including anal? Not bloody likely, mate. Take your time. Boil the frog slowly.

Keep writing. Ignore the dipshits who can't even write a coherent comment. Fuck 'em.

who keep telling authors to ignore the comments. Hey idiot, if he intended to ignore the comments, he wouldn't allow them. You really are a fucked up human being, aren't you, always complaining about other's opinions. What's the matter idiot, feel guilty reading this shit?

Very lucky girl with a great husband. Fun, so much fun. Xoxoxoxo Annette ♠️♠️♠️💋💋

Just imagine how many couples go on vacation to let loose wind up drunk doing crazy shit like this . I definitely know guys who let there wife get fucked and blamed all the drinks . A few woman I know while on vacation with hubby snuck and cheated on him . Vegas must have it happening often , the islands and Europe is loaded with sex clubs . One guy and his wife was so drunk and high on molly that she got fucked by 3 college guys from unlv all night . Hubby was so drunk he could hardly move while they triple teamed her over and over. They were sick in the morning and devestated when they found out they were only 18 , younger than her own kids. Marriage made it but hubby struggled for a couple of years over it .

Well, wow! Great to see a new talent here. Especially in a genre that’s not too well represented these days here. I thought I’d add this here, I’ve included some notes I included in my post to your other story.

There are just a few tiny gripes that will finesse your writing – and these are just small editorial things that a lot of writers fall for. You should try to use the … instead of three separate full stops … and if you use these, at least use them this way: ... which is correct.

You do use capitals and don’t use them in the wrong place. For example see this;

You wrote:

“Now you’re getting it,” William said grinning in satisfaction. “Now why don’t you get up and take off that little g-string.”

What you should have written is:

“Now you’re getting it,” William said grinning in satisfaction, “now why don’t you get up and take off that little g-string.”

Every time someone speaks you have a capital. “Hello,” for example. When dialogue is used twice in a sentence (only use it twice, for anything more use a new sentence) you can break it up ending the first part with a comma (,) not a full stop, then continue the dialogue with a lower case letter. The reason for this is what the person is saying is one sentence. You have just interrupted it correctly, to show where the descriptive part needs to be. Many people don’t do this well and you do, but these few tiny errors are a bit of a distraction. Also try to avoid using double exclamation marks, like husbands one is all you need at the same time. ☺︎

Also try not to use CAPITALS to express dialogue. Use italics as this gets the point across far better. You have used them correctly in this story and the last one.

I’m not picking, just advising that an editor would pick these out – which would make your work completely printable – you could sell these online, they are that good.

Your imagination is fantastic, characters seem rounded and real, you have a great ear for realistic dialogue and characters. It all flows very well. I think you’re a fantastic writer and need to be encouraged. I am sorry if I’ve noted the few minor niggling little bits that are just a tiny bit of grit in an otherwise well oiled machine.

Well done and thank you for getting me excited – and chomping at the bit for a new piece of erotica from you.

Love it i hope there is more

Peter and Nick should have made Lauren clean their cocks after cumming in her... and Nick should have went ass to mouth to show Michael what a depraved slut Lauren is...

Both stories by the author are relatively recent so hopefully their are sequels to both...

Good job... keep it up!!!

Liked the story but felt Michael just pimped out his wife....he knew what happens in ger drunken stupor and encouraged it

Great Story, been there and done that myself many times. But what is wrong with these readers?? If it isn't the Asshats Complaining about How Slutty the Wife Acted it is the other Asshats complaining about the Author's Writing ability. These "fantasy's" are for the enjoyment (masturbation) of all the folks that like to read these things. I can tell you Jerks that these things really do happen, I know because I've done it all my life. I've have shared all my women I've had Including all 5 wives. We've gone out for a drink and picked up guys in bars a zillion times. We've even done this exact pickup like here. We've picked up a half dozen guys at once at a porno theater that all fucked my wife #3 in the 80's. We've picked men at a bar and went to his house so he could fuck my gal while I sat there Smoking and drinking his beer more times than I can count. My biggest Fantasy was to Black Breed My first wife or my Gal (Terri) just after her. They Never got black preg but it wasn't for lack of Trying. I loved sharing all my women, it was always a thrill. But as Thrilling and Exciting as it was I have to say in retrospect that it really isn't good for our relationships. Once you let the Genie "Out of the Bottle" it can never be put back it. How many of my friends would "sneak" back over to see my woman for seconds the next day while I was at work? MANY!! And Strangely it turned me on all the more. How many brought flowers or drugs to change the dynamics? I always Believed that Great Communication led to a Great Relationship. But tho My First Wife (Karen) and I started with Great Communication but in the end she just played Me for her own Benefit, and Cut me loose once she realized she didn't need me to pickup other guys. LOL Details and facts of a private secret rendezvous were always difficult to get, Lies from all my Women prevailed and led to breakups. Sharing My Women all my life means that Now that I'm old I can't get aroused anymore. Never realized that 60 yrs ago when My First Love, my High School Sweetheart cheated on me, then confessed leading to the Best Sex in my life (at that time) would have such a long lasting effect.

Fuck, what an awesome story. Don't stop writing now.

Talk about stupid shit you got it! She my wife Shannon said that it wasn't a date. That's what she said returning late from what was supposed to be a meeting. O I said so it was a meeting with your F___ buddy? No it wasn't she replied. It was a meeting with Harold my boss. BS I said as I showed her the pictures of them screwing on her bosses desk. She instantly got quiet. Then continued to say that she was sorry that it just happened and it was the first time and will never happen again. Please John forgive me. I said that I was going to HR in the morning and see what they think about this situation. Please don't John if you do it will cost me my job. At this moment do you really think that I give a shit about your job? What about the embarrassment? You should have thought about that before anything happened. Besides I warned you about that lowlife homewreacking SOB. We slept together but before she got in bed I said go and try to wash away the cheat off of yourself. The next morning she asked if she could go with me. I said yes you are going for sure if you want to try to save our marriage. We were together while they were asking questions. At first they were cocky trying to put the blame on Shannon. I let them blow smoke for a few minutes and let her sweat. Then I lowered the boom on them with the information that I had gathered. Golden boy Harold had been in trouble 3 different times that a friend of mine had told me that worked at the same place but had already left that company. The ringleader asked where I had gotten the information trying to make it sound like it was false. I said that I would not give up that information unless we had to go to court and believe me that won't be good publicity for the company and local management. Ned the ringleader said that they would be in touch with us within the week. I said we would allow them 24 hrs at the max. We left. I called a lawyer that had done work for us in the past. He referred us to his partner and we set up an appointment. Just in case. Ned's secretary called the next morning saying that Ned would like us to come in. We went in. Again he started out cocky. I instantly took out my phone and said excuse me for a few I need to confirm our appointment with our lawyer. He said ok ok ok. I said stop the BS this is not a game but one more strike and you will deal with our lawyer. In the end Harold was transferred with the stipulation it was his last chance. He also had to pay a sizable amount to us for his actions. The company also paid a sizable amount. Shannon came to work for me. Life is a lot better now.

To Buster2U:

5 wives, each of whom fucked, gangbanged, pulled trains while you watched and cheating behind your back when you weren't around. Yeah - perfect life; perfect marriage(s). And they each dumped your stupid ass! Who'd a figured on that happening?!?! LOL!!

And these were the marriages you enjoy and prefer?

You're an idiot. Thank god all those kids weren't yours.

All three of your submissions are 5 Star. Quality writing and fun reading.

5 stars!! I hope you write more stories. I so want to watch my wife screw and suck another man. I have mentioned it to her while having sex and it seemed to turn her on. We are in our early 30s so I am sure it will become a reality someday.

Abby let loose and had a wild night. She was my wife of 21 years. I let loose with a divorce. The children that was still home were aloud to choose whom to live with. I have both of them.

Yep, you can continue this nasty sex saga.

Always a 10 inch cock, two stars.

Whew!!! HOT!!!, HOT!!!, HOT!!!!

Time for another of Laura's DP adventures.

I’m still pretty new here and really enjoyed reading this.