All Comments on 'A Journey Never Begun Pt. 03'

But you really need to increase the length of your chapters. I personally find anything under 3 pages to be slightly irritating since it doesn't give you the immersion necessary to really enjoy it.

Thanks for the comments. As this is a significant departure in writing for me I am still getting my style together. I will be increasing the length over the next few parts and I will be delving into more of the backstory of Muddle and his apprenticeship.

I am still sorting out the balance of moving the current story forward and filling in the backstory of Muddle and the world he lives in.

Please bear with me as I try to fine tune juggling a much large world and it's history and the effects on an orphan many times over as he makes his way through it.

James

Great premise and wonderful narrative