by Alpha276
Thank you for giving me your feedback. Every opinion matters! I will try to get better!
You stated that you were trying to make it as a writer. I suggest your getting an editor as a start. Your punctuation is poor. Your grammar is ok. Sentence structure needs work. Your timing is off. I will accept all of these from an amatuer without much concern. From an aspiring professional. . . not so much. I am a member but do not usually log in. Sorry. -- Milo Talon