All Comments on 'A Married Man's Sugar Baby'

For me, a good Literotica story has to meet three criteria:

-The writer needs to have a good command of spelling and grammar

-It needs to be believeable.

-It needs to have a lot of good sex

I have to say, you hit all three perfectly! Hope to see some more from you

Congratulations on a good job, well done. You demonstrate a command of the elements of good writing, with excellent spelling, grammar and punctuation. Interesting character development and a unique plot twist, together with some incredibly hot, sensuous descriptions of great sex make this story a favorite to be enjoyed over and over again.

All in all, this is quite a superlative effort and well deserving of a five star rating. Do keep up the good work, and please give us more of your writing to enjoy.

I love the story from beginning to end......it wasn't all over the place. It was well executed. Good job and I can't wait to read some more from you.

i cant believe this is your first story. awesome job! looking forward to more!

This was incredibly thought out, very well structured. The initial meeting, the tentative shyness by the man, the transformation into a full-fledged sexual encounter was stunning to immerse myself into. Without a doubt, you have a definite commercial future with your genre and command and overall sexual eroticism, Serena!

This was a well written sexy fun story that just flowed. Similar stories have been done, but this was something hot and fresh. You have a real talent and I look forward to reading more! So very naughty!

I absolutely LOVE your stories! ENCORE!

You are truly wonderful.

Made me want to be a daddy;-)

well written story. HOT

Hot story, well written, but with a few careless typos. 5 stars. The only thing is that, in the real world, savvy girls like Brooke would use condoms?

Well crafted. Nice story.

It's obvious the guy is excited. But not as obvious the girl feels any arousal until the end. Consider explaining how she thinks, and what there is about her profession that arouses her.

Good story, but calling her a slut and a whore adds nothing to the story for me.