All Comments on 'A Mermaid's Blessing'

When writing stories here...

Either go 1st or 3rd person.

This you, your, & yours repetition doesn't work.

Don't take my word for it...

The writers with the top rated stories here do not use 2nd person.

They write it as if they are in the story (1st person) or as someone outside the story telling us about it after the fact (3rd person).

Love the imagination.

Pick a tense that works for you...and have a good editor or proofreader.

Hey if your there I have a story idea if your interested and if your not then I understand

Love it!