by MistressTrinityJones
Oh My……
This series is really getting good.
I can’t wait to see what more his mistress has in store for him…..The peeplay element was a nice touch.
What a lucky slave indeed.
Getting beat with a wooden spoon is a nice touch....Plus a sweet drink of piss is a real treat....
After the first chapter, I was getting nervous that your characters had no emotions. Her internal debates and worries made the story so much better for me.
Your writing is quality. Five stars.
ohmygawd you're so wicked - you're a fantasy! I'd trade places with Jared anytime!
I thought the first paragraph was perfect. I thought it captured quite well the running mind set with all of its emotions of this new slave in a new and challenging situation.
I appreciated the nuance of that first paragragh very much.
You have your work cut out for you continuing with this story, as you have set such a high standard for yourself so far. I so very much hope you continue to be up to the wonderful task you have begun.
I think I fell in love with MistressTinityJones...just a bit!
of a very good story - thank you. You should be a little more careful over paragraphs, however; the start of this chapter seemed like a solid and unappealing block of text and the story is too good to be let down by less than perfect presentation.
Apart from that niggle, very well done - a great story!
that golden shower. He'd not served well enough to deserve Mistress's lovely golden shower. Urine is a treat but you marked him well. The lucky thing!