All Comments on 'A Modern Harem Pt. 06'

Started out well but for chapters it's always the same shit now. Monica hides something, he gets mad but almost instantly caves in, they make up, everyone happy, then repeat. It's getting boring.

There is a difference between harem and open relationship. Where's the warning at the beginning of the story saying that this would be a cuck story?

I like the story, but Alan is turning into a total wimp, how can he allow that's being done to him? The constant lying, he starts to get mad then he is like its ok. Come on

You had a great story till this part. In the first part, she said " Your the only man for me" Now you gonna have her with daddy and brother. After all the things she sprung on him and now this. Nope

this series took a big dive...

agree with the other comments. Your story goes in all directions and in the end it affects its quality.

In addition, it looks strangely like Island of Wonder. it is a real shame not to respect the framework that you have set out.

Lost me with this chapter.

Yeah this was a completely unnecessary 180 of the story and all the ground work laid before. If you wanted to do some weird free use family thing you could have and should have created a separate story.

So is it really a harem when you let multiple other men fuck your women?

At this point he is just a cuck

Lost me once Monica banged other guy. It's a Harem. You do not share your women

The end ruined it . what happend to monica saying hes the only guy she wants

Lying/witholding information is one of the main reasons open marriages fail 98% of the time. Now that you've moved from a harem/poly marriage to open/swapping, jealosy, another main reason these relationships inevitably fail, may not be far off. I'm not sure how you're going to course-correct the story, but I'll give it a chance to see if you can pull it off.

Blech. Don't bother writing any more of this, it's not going to make anyone happy. Cucks don't want a harem, they can't give even one women what she deserves. And, it's not a harem if there's sharin'.

First one-star review ever.

This ending just killed the story for me.

Your story, your choices but giving other men access to his wives seems to be an unexpected change of direction for the group and a very negative one at that.

You must use them wrong seeing as how often you get it wrong

To the author: forget the negative comments, this is one crazy orgy. Folks, this is FICTION!!!!! Had to laugh all the way.

Rumpleminty---Thank you. You are nuts, but my kind of nuts.

To goodshoes2: Bad fiction with misleading tag and title

The story is utter garbage, the first parts were good, but now everything has slipped into filthy swingerism. GG is a rag, he gave his almost wife to some kind of left dick... The author is a complete bastard. Put the right tags...

It turns out that the harem was assembled for her family, not the guy. What a disgusting story. GG kukold, who has several girlfriends, and everyone will be fucked by the father of his main wife. What kind of bastard fantasy, author?

Specify in the tags treason or kukold...

Disgusting...It was great till you added this chapter

Now I need to wash my eyes out with soda ash to get rid of the memory of reading this crap

The entire just nosedived into a ditch becoming juvenile rubbish.

In one fell swoop you ruined your own story with this one chapter turning it into utter garbage.

I do not know how you can save it.

Scores a disappointing 1/5.

Turned our hero into a zero. What's next? Cuck boy gonna get pegged by daddy Dom? This was a great story until this chapter.

While I could do without the incest, the twists and turns of this missive are quite sharp. Whether Alan is a cuck or not makes no difference. More juice to the sex.

incest ruined it can we get alternate stuff?

Ok big red flag here...i went back and checked...during her 1st mention of wanting to start a Harem she told him that she only wanted to sleep with one man..him...and promised she would never cheat..now shes fucking her bro in this chapter and probably hee dad soon...so not only did she omit the incest harem, but she also lied about his being the only cock she would have. So now you definitely can't trust her. Shame this was a rather loving polyamorous story until all this deception was introduced. Shame as its time to cut her loose back to her family and take his other 3 ladies for himself. Otherwise i forsee heartache

How to destroy a good story.

More fibbing, more deception by Monica...never any mention of the family 'thing's & how it affected her...

TRUST is a big part of a relationship; this is too weird, too fast, really should have come out before this!

I am going to read the rest of the story...my curiosity is up, to see just how far this goes/if there turns out to be anything that saves it from where it has fallen to...

😕😭👎

Man i was careful with every chapter double checked every tag before reading. Finally i know why this is in loving wifes instead of erotic Coupling. After reading through a lot of traps i guess i am immune to this shit now. I don't even got pissed just disgusted. From polygamy to cuckold.

Caught me off guard with continuous chapters i forgot to read comments prior to this chapter. My mistake.

Are open relationships with a mix of men and women way more realistic? Yes. Are they the 'ultimate male fantasy' that our protagonist and the readers were promised? No.

Disappointing. Definitely feels like a betrayal by Monica, and everything up to now has been predicated on Alan being the only guy in the family. The whole "I can't be jealous" thing is bullshit.

Not even worth the energy for a comment

This was OK for the first 4 chapters. Now, not so much.

Monica told Alan she wouldn’t be with any other guys. The family joining was a crappy idea. Monica pushed Alan into everything. This series turned to crap.

The addition of Monica's family was a really s---y idea. The story was well received up to this point. And Monica was never going to let another man inside her? I can see where Alan's life will be for crap when Monica starts running around on him.

As others have said, the point of a harem is for a guy to have a bunch of girls...not for the girl to recruit other girls for her family to fuck.

What a great way to ruin a story. This is my stop.

all this author's stories are the same shit, he doesn't change a thing man the cuckold husband is betrayed and takes it cool after blowing up for everything rightly, he comes back and apologizes to everyone as if nothing had happened? seriously author if i knew you i would really open your head to see if you have brains in your head instead of shit! this site just has this kind of story nothing original or something different when it comes to these tags

As others have said. Monica goes from being manipulative and telling Alan no other man will have her to jumping on her brothers sick in this chapter.

Fucked up the story. Should delete the chapter

0-1 stars and stopped reading as soon as anything happened between his girls and anyone else. So sorry this turned so wrong.

No need to explain the one star. Someone needs to explain the whole polyamorous relationship to you. Harem stories notwithstanding you just don’t have a good grasp on what they actually are.

So, about the condition in the beginning that he would be the only guy...just kicked that to the curb did ya?

yeah this story went from an ok harem story to just a pile of shit as soon as other guys got to fuck his women. If i could give this chapter a 0 i would

While I will agree that this chapter ruins the story, I think it's only partly because the "promise" of fidelity was thrown out at the first strange dick.

It's mostly because you tend to rush, and force things in the story for mediocre sex scenes, he went from betrayed and hurt and tense to orgy and watching someone dick his fiance down in the span of minutes and out of nowhere, the family was introduced, watched a relationship nuke go off and then banged within minutes.

I get that this is more smut than actual story, it's understandable the plot is almost non existent, the problem is when you write smut that's this long, there needs to be more than quick flash in the pan sex scenes or it gets boring/really easy to start picking apart.

So while I do think this story ended up on the wrong side of mediocre, there were parts I thought were fun.

Ruined it

Excellent storyline and plot. The protagonist is not only enviable but admirable as well. A person of integrity.

I know this is a fantasy but there still needs to be an internal logic. Monica said no other men. She didn't make an exception for father, brother, any random uncles, cousins or grandparents.

How does Alan trust her again? She lied and bullied the others into complicity. What other lies will she tell when it suits her. This character has gone from adorable to deceitful and manipulative. Its spoiling the story.

I rated 5* all previous episodes, this received one. Even it is fantasy, a dad who fucks him daughter should be hanged up.

Monica lies by omission and it makes the foundation of the harem weak. Also adding the free us inlaws was a bad ifs. It undercut the whole agreed upon rules for the harem. With only one male having sex with h omen and no other sex with women not in the harem. It was literally stated in the third episode. So what the author suddenly forget his own story?? The are a few well known amazon authors who do that and they steadily have been losing reader just because of forgetting details of their story. You get one star for this dumb lazy mistake.

The whole point of a harem fantasy is to have one man with group of women devoted only to him (and usually each other). Tossing in the incest aspect and having his girls screw Monica's family...especially the men, completely ruins the fantasy.

It was fine until this chapter....such a shame.

Lost me at this point. Great story until now but I'm gone.

So now i know why the rating of the previous parts are low. I will go back and change mines to 1* as well to let others know to not waste time to read this series.

And it's ruined. Glad someone commented about this chapter in one of the earlier ones. Lets us all know it's a waste of time. Undermines the whole idea of a harem. The moment any of his harem were touched by someone else outside of it (male), it was in the bin. And the beta male allowed it. Disappointing.

No no no no no.

They made it at the start that NO OTHER MAN will ever fuck the harem girls.

And now he breaks that 1 rule by allowing his fiance to get fucked by another man.

Very disapointing.

К сожалению тут автор ошибся... Почему герой должен входить в ИХ семью? Почему он подчиняется? Почему Эшли позволила Киту заняться с ней сексом? Как герой мог это позволить? Речь шла о том, чтобы Он занялся сексом с матерью и сестрой, а не чтобы мужчины чужой семьи поиском его жён!

Utter bull

Not only was this story ruined at the fact the "Alan is the only male" rule was broken here, but also because there was never any mention if Monica was still fucking her brother and father. She could be fucking them both behind his back and the topic was never addressed

Fun read, and sexy as hell, but, WTF?

I no longer trust Monica as a reader, and I have no idea how our hero can trust her.

Marriage should be off the table.

Then, Monica gets sex before she pays the tax, even AFTER her family compliments our hero for disciplining Monica.

This story is getting swallowed by excess. It is a glorious, sexy mess, but, nonetheless...

What would've made this more tolerable, is if the guys had sex too. Like making it so Alan and the other guys were bisexual too, even if the info is just sprung on us.