All Comments on 'A New Beginning'

Maybe Jan hadn’t done this in a while but Karen soon realized how skilled she was. Erotically charged, well paced, tightly crafted scene. Your other wonderfully erotic piece around Lori and Sandra left room for developing your two characters and more, while this piece ends perfectly just as title suggests.

I've read both of your stories and I'm afraid both need a lot of work. There are spelling errors (although I suppose some could be typos), grammatical errors, repetition and so on. Some errors are fairly minor, others scream out. I recommend that you find a good editor to help you out with these problems. Writing is like any craft, it needs plenty of practice to improve. So just keep working at it and hopefully you will see a gradual improvement.

Good but the word is FINALLY.And breast is plural.

Making the ladies hairy and naturally aromatic would really good and one to be the "mommy' despite their ages.

A few spelling mistakes.