All Comments on 'A Night in the Sun'

This is a well-framed story. The amount of set-up was proportioned well to the amount of sexual content, and the tension was well-written. The title is also nice. I enjoyed it, thanks.

Intresting fromat, nice play and use of words. Lovely flow to keep you intrested. Well done.

I loved it. The build up was fantastic but try adding a little more detail in to make the entire story fantastic.

As a child, I would play pretend games with elaborate plots, and this sunshine woman reminds me of one of my games.

i like getting my nectar from that place, too!

I could feel the warmth.

a fragment of a tale, an idea for expansion, later, into a story.

This is the second piece of the author's I've read and the other was even a smaller fragment. Guess I’ll check the length of the next one before I bother.