All Comments on 'A Pair of Angels'

now thats a wish i would love to happen loved the story

That was just sexy upon sexy I cant wait for the continuation of this story

This story starts out decently enough but it begins to go down hill when you bring out the mug. As it is written now with Ryan not telling Chole what it does from the begging makes the whole sex scene feel a little rapey, it's not quite there but with it making her want to have sex with him without her knowing it does make it kind of sound like a rape drug. I would have him tell her before she drinks from it, then you can add in the issue of Chole being a lesbian and if Ryan is willing to become a woman for her. And that brings me to the second problem, there is no drama. There is no issue that needs to be solved, no problem that needs to be overcome, there is nothing for the reader to become emotionally invested in. Everything is taken care of for the main characters so I have nothing to care about.

Emma Watson, Anna Kendrick, Doctor Who references... This could have been fanfiction, and that is beautiful--and totally hot. Give us more. PLZ