All Comments on 'A Pleasant Carriage Ride'

This one deserves a nod to @CalebZhass whose Hollister story got me thinking about erotic machinery.

😄 brilliant!

Structurally, within the 750 words I note that you forgo the paragraph at the end where they get to where they're going, in place of the paragraph at the start detailing the Ecuadorian coffee. So, that's where your priorities are?

There's nothing worse than finishing a mug of coffee.

Love the meta-ness! Cute and snappy, great work.

Very meta. Although if I didn't know any better I'd sat a guy wrote this, because it ended before the ladies could climax.

Not scoring this as it would not be fair. I have a hard time with deciding which I hate more, 2nd person or 750 word writer's masturbation.

It's February again, that dreaded time of year when writers whip their quills out and stroke them. "Fuck 'em," you growl. "If they're going to insist on sucking in public, they could at least wrap their metaphorical lips about something a little harder and a lot longer than a 750 word folly!" You'll show them. Oh, yes you will!

Nice 750 word cup of coffee .

Oh it's definitely a woman writing . A guy would have her climax in 350 words lol .

It's all foreplay. Ali and Fiona will be back in the cafe next week.

Cute. I should break the fourth wall more often.

Nice start-the-month fun....

Delightful short story!

Hugz. Thanks for the shout out. I love this. You actually did what I originally wanted, to write a story about a mechanical fuck contraption in 750 words. :) Mine also started out like that, just turned out a bit longer :P

Also, the "through the 4th wall" moment in the middle is a lovely touch.

Kinky. Love it.

This was great. 5 carriage-operated stars ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ 😋

Thank you kindly. A voucher for a free ride is in the post.