by TheOldProf
Looking forward to Part 2. Please - The honeymoon suite gift.
Also wondering who was behind these "GIFTS"?
Assuming Sophie was a "VIRGIN". Thanks for writing.
The stories I read need to be based on some sort of reality and this has none. People in a distressed situation just don't respond like described.
I enjoyed your tale, but you need an editor. The change from third person to first person is jarring, and the dialogue is missing the proper quotation marks. There are grammatical mistakes (e.g. "a attentive lover" should be an attentive lover"), missing words, a lack of commas between independent clauses, etc. I think an editor could have helped you clean up your story to make it more "readable".