by moreandmore
I have never heard the term Knicker (Panty) waste before but immediately knew what you were saying - very clever and expressive comment.
To my mind there are three key components to a story: the plot, the character development and the dialog. I think this story hit all three pretty well and I enjoyed it. I appreciated that someone else also recognized the error and commented that panty waste was really pantywaist and referred to a less-than-masculine guy. It certainly is a phrase that isn't used anymore (probably because it wouldn't be PC). This story cruised to its ending without any glitches which is a little too slick, but it was a good read. Stick in an obstacle or two and it would really be great. I still gave it a 5*.
Don't you just love it when good things happen to good people! Aside from tearing up from time to time (I do that a lot -- sentimental old fool that I am), I also enjoyed the many funny zappers you dropped in throughout.
Your spot in my Favorites list is well deserved, so keep them coming! Thanks!
You ended it waaaaay too soon! I realize you might have other ideas but please consider adding more chapters to this story. Thanks!
But I loved it. Off kilter all the way. Good job.
....a sweet and heartwarming story, and the Willie Nelson reference at the beginning. I had never heard that song before. Now that I have, it reminds me of two special ladies in my life: my deceased wife (who was very good to me both in and out of bed, and whose 40DDs were a lot of fun to play with) and my last girlfriend (who gave awesome blowjobs and liked it when I took her from behind while standing in front of a mirror). I will be checking out your other stories. Thank you!
What a great story. It would be nice to know if any of this story is true or is it 100% of your imagination. If it is all of your imagination kudo's to you!
I have to admit that this is a good look at early retirement. The rate that women jumped at him kind of surprised me.
every body else commented. Great good feel story with a happy ending.
I think I have read all of your stories and liked them. 5*
Great storyline - superb characters
Looking forward to reading more of your work
It is so refreshing to read a story about REAL love. These 3 people all had rough lives but they overcame all the adversity with each others help. Boy what a feel good story.
Now I have to go back and read more of your stories.
Thanks for a very entertaining and enjoyable story.
Reading this was a lot of fun. Your writing style kept me chuckling all the way through it.
Despite my enjoyment of the story and the way you wrote it, I know how abruptly a situation can change. While I was in the Army, I had two friends who each were killed before they could marry their loves. It like to broke my heart to see the survivors cut off with no military benefits. A third friend retired, but died before he could sign up for the military's Survivor Benefit Plan. His wife got nothing at all after a twenty seven year marriage, all of which was while he was serving in the Army.
Sometimes life just sucks.
Very enjoyable.... definitely a ‘feel-good’ story. Your writing style fits the story well. It’s not too wordy, but sufficient descriptions where appropriate. Not a lot of dialog, but again, when used it’s appropriate to the story. I was kind of surprised he didn’t build the house sooner, as a place suitable for Missy to raise Jeff... and potentially for Rose as well. Doesn’t matter, the chosen ending works better.
I Loved the Ending! But that's a Whole N'ther story isn't it!
Naughty But Nice Is What I Think Of This Story! ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!
P.s. You gotta give credit where credit is due! This is One Fan-Bloody-Tastic Story!
Good character development and dialogue. Every now and then a good, simple romance story without excess drama is welcome.
Well done.
Thanks for the feel good story to start the day. Well writen and just the right pace. Now, what happens to Missy?
"She seems overly concerned that everyone is paying their deductible."
When I see a clever line like that, I have to give the nod to it.
Was debating whether to give it 4 or 5-stars, but accidentaly hit 3-stars. And of course there is no changing the scores.
You write some of the most original stories I have read on this site. I'm reading them chronologically and enjoying them all so far. Thanks for the entertainment!! Cookie
Great writing. Bonus, no animals were hurt in the writing of this story. It’s all I could think of as a comment, everything else is perfect
The writing is great. The characters are appropriately developed for their parts in the story. While the main character is a bit of a cad to start with his reason for being that way is well established. I also think it is great that he falls for the woman he was attracted to in the first place instead of developing some outlandish harem.
Thank you for sharing.
There is a lot of heart in this one.
I may have to chase down the Willy Nelson tune - you are the second author to reference it.
If you want to put this into another forum, you might want to look at:
"Missy, I've got a camper parked on the side of my house. You can stay there. It doesn't have running water but you can always come inside my place."
House = trailer? Not sure if it is standard to use the two interchangeably - if so, I am educated by the reference. If it were "home" rather than house, I would have read it as "mi casa es su casa".
Green-something
Another good story
Love storied as this
USMC 2 tours Vietnam but love good romantic stories
Best hero colonel Brandon Jane Austen
Can go either way erotic or non erotic just nice heroes and heroines
Keep writing stories like this and I will keep reading
Great job! Wow, you touched my Feel Goods in a big way. Thank you!
I just read this and must say KUDOS. Today is the day before Christmas and I needed a boost. My wife was born on Christmas day and the holiday seasons were very good. I lost my wonderful wife of 44 yrs. almost 4 yrs ago now. The holidays are
not so good anymore. By myself and no one around. Your story reminded me of love and caring. I had forgotten. Once again...THANK YOU
Your stories have that flow that tells you a great story teller is writting, more please.
DNA would prove Jeff was Jeff's baby. Also if Jeff had left a will or made Missy beneficiary of his life insurance policy she would have gotten the money.
Yes DNA would prove Jeff was the Father and Yes if he left a will that would work. But from experience I know for a fact that young men in the military seldom do what they need to do in a timely manner. Former Aircrew US Navy
Lilac I'm sorry to say but Anonymous 3/23 is too accurate. While stationed in Germany we had a recently married young airman join our unit. After his honeymoon he brought his wife with him and they lived off-base. He was riding his bicycle home when he was struck and killed by a speeding car. Since he had just married he felt there was no rush to change his insurance information so all his money went to his mother who didn't like the new wife. The wife was not able to receive any of his insurance benifits. Never learned if his wife was pregnant; only hoped that if she was pregnant her in-laws were kind to her.
Thanks to Anon 3/23 and Anon 4/14. Perhaps we need to educate the young military personnel better. Hmm maybe have their Sergeant explain things to them. I don't know. It just seems wrong that the wives and children will not receive what they deserve.
Thank you again for both your responses.
finding a project that requires aid and abet fits the category quite nicely. TK U MLJ LV NV
Lovely little story. Only one problem -- I could not believe that the young mother would think about giving baby away for adoption without taking the plunge and going to her mother for help. No matter how badly daughter and mother were, a mother would do anything to protect her son -- even reach out to her own mother as an act of desperation.
What a great story nicely written with good description of characters and details, just about believable.
Oldwit knows what he's talking about (this time anyway). Thank you for your story. 5* for sure!
somewhere east of Omaha
Nicely written story as it flowed well and had interesting characters. Well one 5++stars
This is probably the third time I've read this story and each time it's gotten better. It moves quickly and the characters just seem real. Nice people doing the right thing - without any concern of what they would get in return. The answer is the continuous improvement in your outlook on life. A lesson I clearly should have learned earlier in my life! I'm on my "rerun" cycle of this author's content and I know I'll be commenting again soon!
A nice unpredictable story that is well written and shows the best in people. Well done!
Not Bad there were so many was to go with the story it kept me on my tows thinking how it would end
Keep it going
Went a different way than I supposed. Very good story and just good enough to excuse a shortage of character development ( Missy and mom.)....
generally nice story
however the interaction between the characters is feeling off to me.
he didn't elaborate further on her feelings for him and why he can't sleep with her, which I think was needed to have closure on the relationship between missy and Simon. (a definite end)
Now they keep in contact due to Jeff jr. and Kayla? (idk what that half ass flirting was coming from towards the end here). Missy has shown and voiced her interest not only sex but also relationship-wise but he never really said no or clarified anything.
he is in a relationship/marries Rose, which I first thought from your description and stereotype was a 50 something, heavier set woman.
idk felt more like you initially intended missy and Simon to end up together, had him hookup with rose and u ended up liking it so much you just kept with it and just forgot about missy but brought his player self back with the Kayla flirting.
A very fun story, ditto to tomo111. Never under3stimate a guy with cowboy boots and hat. They know what good fashion and life are all about. 5 stars
Cute story, loved the humor. "Sheesh, women. Like I'm going to give up my truck." has to be one of the funniest lines I've read on this site.
Simply stellar. Loved Simon's attachment to little Jeff. Even Kayla's character demonstrated some depth and likeability.
A little bit different from the norm, but a nice tale nonetheless. Was thinking of 4 but decided on 5
I like when women have just a LITTLE bit of extra weight, it makes them look feminine and makes them feel soft and cuddly<3
This was a pleasant story. Simon is a good man and both Missy and Rose know this. He married Rose and they both stay in touch with Missy and Jeff. It is a heart-warming story that is rare here in Literotica. Five stars for sure
I laughed out loud when I read that line. Rose is indeed a keeper. Great story; funny as hell. And dragon woman actually redeemed herself.
Good story I don’t recall reading it but a good mix of serious and humor! Very well done with good plot, characters and dialogue and I was entertained!
Please do keep writing and I will keep reading.
A well-structured story with a fun caste of characters, yes, even K. Simon's magic must have rubber off on her.
Lovely. Thank you for the nice thoughts and feelings. Most times HAPPY is a prescription always needing filling