by maturesubmale_for_F
I’m really quite pleased with myself for struggling through to the end. A very much run of the mill storyline that’s been done by many others much better and which I’ve enjoyed. Reducing it by 20,000 words would help to improve it as sometimes less is more. It meanders rather than flows and needs to be more positive. But that’s only my opinion and I see many readers have enjoyed it.
I am blown. Such a good story such well crafted words amd such well thought punishments.