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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
great idea

But the delivery lacked. It failed. So many times I thought "OK, here we go!" To find that no, no we don't.

I am not trying to attack, but seriously, it needed seasoning. Pity, ir could have been SO juicy.

Monmusu_WriterMonmusu_Writerover 5 years agoAuthor
Thanks for the comment

I'm still new at writing so I appreciate any feedback.

How exactly do you think I could improve my writing? Should the story have been longer, or the sex more detailed?

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Funnily enough, I started writing erotica before I started writing non-erotic works. I had this idea that I simply couldn't get out of my head, so I typed it up and posted it. For those wondering about the username, it comes from "Monmusu Quest", the original Japanese name fo...