All Comments on 'A Sub's First Time'

by subgirl78

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shaneeshaneeabout 14 years ago
I liked it!

I liked the way you expressed the slaves emotions, but then maybe i am biased since the scene reminds me of my early encounters with my loving Master. On the other hand, it may be because your writing brought me into her mind, and that was a good experience and technique. Only criticism I have is I think you need to watch the few typos I saw. Otherwise, nice one!

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