All Comments on 'A Suburban Rendezvous'

Excellent, very nicely composed. Have to admit, I'd love to see a second chapter where Gennifer catches her best friend and mother together and joins in the fun and games...

This story is one of the best I have ever read on this or any other site. Please continue...

<blockquote>"Excellent, very nicely composed. Have to admit, I'd love to see a second chapter where Gennifer catches her best friend and mother together and joins in the fun and games..."</blockquote>

Yeah . . . <i>no</i>. This has more the makings of a romantic love story than a "hot lesbian threesome." I'd like to see this unfold into an ultimately fulfilling "relationship" story.

...but quite over-written.

You don't need to over-explain, over-describe, over-everything. Most people can figure out what's happening a in a story.

Maybe point this at one of Lit's volunteer editors and ask them to show you how you could have trimmed it into a tighter, more rewarding read.

This is the way stories should be written. By filling in those details the discerning reader gets a sense of the excitment, the danger, the need surrounding the protagonists. From the descriptions my own heart pounds in sympathy, my nostrils filled with the smells of the disturbed earth, my soul aches with their loss from parting.

I think what got me the most about this one is the familiar feelings it brought to the surface.... very nicely done.

Thought it was a young man jumping all those fences, since the light came on in the girlfriends window. I feel trouble comming from this meeting so close to home.

What a lovely, sex, beautiful story...and a delicious relationship! I LOVE the age disparity...19 and 39? 40...43 or 44??? And, I truly ADORE what these beautiful lovers enjoy DOING with each other...submissive, deep eating...fisting...wonderful!!! Great story, and very well written!!! 💋