All Comments on 'A Surprise After Work'

Good build-up in the beginning. I could see where this was headed, which kept me smiling like the Cheshire cat!<br><br>

It's a bit short, which leaves us wondering about the "eventful" night. (Chapter 2?)<br><br>

A technical note: When writing in the first person, maintain the consistency, i.e. 'He told <i>me</i>, hoping to change <i>my</i> mind.'

loved it but a bit short

We all were deliriously happy until we all died of AIDS.

I found my husband eating a guys ass. Now he eats ass when i show him who's ass he'll be lapping. Let him refuse . My lawyer has papers on hold!