All Comments on 'A Tale of Revenge Ch. 16: Epilogue'

Thank you for taking time in your hectic life to write this. It's been a joy to read.

Looking forward to your next tale of debauchery xx

This is the best story I've read here! Wow! Bravo! *screaming applause👏👏👏😃😍

So what's next??? I mean what other fantastic stories are cooking in your head?

Just wanted to say "Thank You" for a great series.

When did they kill her?

Thank you also for quickly uploading these chapters and writing such a beautifully intricate story!

Okay, I would have preferred for you to continue until she dies at least. To me this story isn't really finished! I love it though, maybe that's why I can't get over it....

Thank you for the amazing experience that was this tale!! Easily one of my top two favorite stories I've ever read on this site!

The writing is well crafted and the story has a lot more weight to it than most on this site- well done. Now, at the end, I feel unsettled where you've left the characters. I think the procreating with another dude thing, and everyone just accepting that, is the thing that probably troubles me most. I have difficulty not feeling Anna's willingness to marry, have sex, and a kid with someone other than Leonid kinda cheapens the whole story. So many questions... She has conflicted feelings about being queen, and yet here she is acting almost like she has no choice... And Leonid approving it? Wtf. Is he like, gonna watch them do it? ::shudder:: the other part that accounts for me feeling squirmy right now is that it seems like there is a lot of story left to tell. So much good stuff still sitting on the table. Please take it as a good sign that I'm bothered, as weird as that sounds. I take the time to comment because I was captured by your story, and invested in the characters'...love? (They never say it do they) enough that I felt moved to say something when I felt it hit a discordant note. I'm curious to know how this ending came about.

Thank you so much for your comment. I really appreciate how much you invested in these characters, I do love them and I'm glad to hear you also enjoyed their story.

I hear what you are saying about the ending and I'll try to address a couple of things. Leonid and Anna were never going to have simple Happily Ever After. I'm sorry that it felt discordant for you. In my mind, the necessities of being queen do outweigh the desire for physical monogamy. Obviously Leonid is her only real romantic partner but it doesn't absolve her of her duties.

As to her decision to be queen, from the very beginning Anna has had a strong sense of duty, at first to her family and friends, then to Dev and finally to the other prisoners. I didn't think it out of character for her to choose to rule for the benefit of others as well as to fulfill her own needs dictated by the desire to fulfill that duty. In doing so, she would have to produce and heir, in order to stabilize the kingdom. I'm considering writing Serena's story and i will explore this decision more if i do.

Leonid, for his part, knows that Anna is dedicated to him, that she loves him (they never do say it :) and that they belong to each other. He has known from the beginning that this was the reality of her life on earth. No, I don't imagine he will stick around to watch. It will be another trial for them, and probably the last one before she quits the mortal coil as it were.

They have been at this for 5 years since the last chapter. I did not imagine the decision was an easy one to make. But again, maybe something to delve into in another story.

What else did you feel was left on the table? Thanks again for your comment. You've got me thinking about a lot of things.

Thank you for your question! I will certainly try to make it more clear in re-writes.

In the scene where Dev is killed Marek tells them that her heart has been irreversibly damaged. There is no power strong enough to repair her heart completely so Leonid has been keeping her alive with magic but, as with all things, the balance takes its toll and she will eventually succumb to the injury.

Like the previous comment said we need to go all the way until dies and has babies. At least give us a short one page chapter. This epilogue could've gone with chapter 15.

Anyway, the story was AMAZING! Such depth and great character development. Publish this story. Even though this is Literotica, once I got to the last three chapters I skipped the sexy scenes just to get back to the main story haha. Great job!

I don't want to think about her procreating with someone else. I don't want to think of her dying. If I have to think of these things, I'd like to emerge to the other side where the happily ever after begins.

I'd almost rather that she chose to die when Leonid gave her the option before. Or that she died soon after her marriage (before making an heir) and then her husband took over in her place. He was already considered a leader so taking full responsibility probably wouldn't be too disruptive to the kingdom.

This ending isn't really an ending and it definitely isn't an epilogue because it didn't act as a conclusion. Do you have one more chapter in you, to create a more satisfying ending?

Thank you both for your comments! I'm sorry this ending has left you wanting. If anything i thought her and Leonid's development, especially as he is clearly moving more and more towards her in terms of the human condition, would have been a romantic way to leave the two of them. It seems the politics of whether or not Anna has to sleep with someone else is very distressing. In all honesty, I didn't expect that in this forum. Thank you for letting me know :)

Thank you for your quite regular updates, and for not letting the story go.

I too was a bit confused about the heart thing, but I read in the comments and your explanation makes sense.

I don't think there's something wrong with the ending, I quite liked it, and I do agree that it was never like a typical happy ending romance story. And I do understand her duties and stuff, since their relationship transcends (did I write that correctly?) human laws.

BUT

I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH I WANT MOREEEEEE. I mean it's only natural for fans of such an amazingly amazing story to want more of Leonid and Anna cuz come on it's hot and cute and interesting and thrilling and the character complexity and depth and OH GOD

You're an awesome writer, and please know that your readers would enjoy reading anything you publish after this, let it be an 'epilogue chapter 2' or a new story all together.

PLEASE DONT STOP WRITING!

Looking forward to seeing a new chapter/story from you

~J

I liked it. It goes back to something we both agree on - The Law of Equivalent Exchange. Nothing can be got if nothing is taken. The law of equivalent exchange. I like the fact it is not a stereotyped happily ever after, but a God making a choice to keep her alive by force even if it means having to slowly watch who he loves die.

so after she dies, does she get to live with Leonid in his world?

I love this story. It's really well written and is far better than most other stories on this site. Thanks for writing and sharing it for free.

But... (And I'm sorry to say this, because you are a great writer and it's totally up to you how you want to end your story)

... I didn't like the ending. If Anna is dying and doesn't know it, that's fine. It's a little confusing to me, as I feel as though Leonid could have sustained her until he gave her the choice to stay in the realm of men or go with him. At that point in the story, he could have stopped supporting her heart and let her go with him; fairer, perhaps, than letting her have a child and then die soon afterwards so that she can never be a mother to it (he knows family is important to her, after all).

But for me, the real sticking point is Rafia. Perhaps I've stupidly missed something, but why could Anna not have an unconsummated marriage to Rafia, and Leonid father her child in secret (either in the usual way, if gods can do that, or with magic). That would mean she wouldn't have to sleep with a man she doesn't love, and after everything she's been through, I don't feel as though she should have to. If Leonid was somehow the father, it would also mean that he, as a god, could continue to watch over the child as a parent, after Anna dies (presuming that Anna can't come and go between levels as gods do...)

I don't know. I love the sorry. I love the characters. I just feel as though the ending isn't very satisfying for any of them, and that with Leonid and Emera's magic, they could have perhaps come up with a better way to continue Anna's bloodline?

Anyway, I have really loved this story. I just wish, for myself, that it ended differently.

an epilogue that leaves sooooooo many threads. Imagination can reign but you could simplywrite more about....affairs of the heart.

I just binge-read the entire thing, and it was a fantastic ride. I would love to read more about their story and I hope you'll write Serena's!

Unlike other readers, I fully enjoy the ending and think it is very appropriate. A happily-ever-after would have ruined the whole impression of the story, as for some people (and I guess Anna is among them), life is just tough, full stop.

I got into your stories from The Siren, but I must admit that I've fallen in love with this one. I got so hooked that I had to read it in my breaks at work, until I finished it.

Please, keep on writing whatever comes to your mind, and keep us posted!

And good luck with your studies!

I honestly and truly think you are the best writer on this site that I have encountered. Thank you so so much for sharing this story with us. I wish you well in your studies, and pray to Leonid that you update the Siren as soon as possible.

Great story, great writer. Keep it up!

I have to know - when she dies, does she go and live with Leonid on the First Level? I understand and agree that she feels responsibility too heavily to ever choose a comfortable life with him while the kingdom is not stable, but when she finally feels thay she achieved everything in the Realm of Men, can she please die and finally be content with Leonid in his world. Maybe she fixes injustice in other realms, who knows?

I loved the story and I wad bothered with the whole marriage thing. But I just loved your writing, development and (!!!) really important, your response to us, readers. It is something a lot of authors should take an example of! Kudos!

I am definitely a new fan and will be checking back for your stories.

you weave your stories so beautifully and write so well! Everything from plot to character development, you are truly talented! Please keep on writing, I am so grateful to read such work! :)

First let me say you have a lot of talent and I do hope you continue! From my comments you know that I was cold, hot and even lukewarm throughout the story. I'm not into the dark and thats just my preference not your writing.

BUT....

That ending was just ugh!! So disappointed, so many questions?? I had it in my head that she would die and maybe through that see dev again. I still don't understand why he had to die?? You could have had Serena take over with Rafi?

What I didn't expect was a god lying to his love for 5 years so his sister could build the empire.up. I didn't expect after going through all that trauma being raped now have to have sex with someone for the sake of the realm.

I feel like you took all this time to make all these amazing characters and then kind of forgot about the two main characers.

Only you know how you wanted the story to end and I respect that but it just left me with a very blah feeling. I tend to like HEA endings and for Anna she deserved it.

I loved this story and I was so hopeful for a wonderful ending... But this left me unsatisfied and with even more questions. Why is she dying, why does she have to produce a heir, how does she not know shes dying if she's full of magic that she can use to heal herself?? This ending just doesn't make sense to me. Maybe if you were planning to create a second story where she leaves the human realm and joins Leonid in his, but then I agree with another commenter - I can't see her wanting to give birth and not be there to raise her child.

I love your writing and I love these characters, this ending just feels like a let down after a fantastic build up.

I really do appreciate your feedback on this ending. I can't ever see myself ending the story on a perfectly HEA note but I appreciate your complaints about the unfinished business and confusion for how we got here. I am working on rewriting the story to hopefully publish it and lots of things are changing. I am still in the first book (its a bit long to be one volume) so I can't promise the end will definitely change, but I can promise that your feedback has been heard and will be taken into account.

Loved this story up until the ending. (It's terrible!) Other than that, I truly enjoyed every bit of it. Ty !

Just want to clarify, by "terrible" I mean it doesn't feel finished. It's a great chapter, @ has the potential to open up a whole new story that could go in any direction. If it's a series, this would be a great end to keep the reader looking forward to the next book. Hope you'll consider continuing or simply adding another 'epilogue' you are a brilliantly creative writer and I do love your stories!!

Fantastic story, so well paced and while the torture parts were so hard her strength made it all worth it. Loved the characters and your drawing out of the plot. What skill, thanks so much for sharing it. Perfect ending too :)

I consumed your book in a day - I literally could not put it down and stop reading. When Anna dies will Leonid take her to the the first level? There are so many unexplored emotions he will need to face as a deity when he will have to "share" Anna! Such a great read, thank you for sharing your talent with us!

Loved your work. Have this one question...

HOW do you manage to have a balance btw your med studies

and writing??Pls tell me. Well, however you do that its

commendable

Omg I did not see that ending coming!! She had died!? Wow!!! I wish you had added another epilogue on - after her child, when she is reunited with Leonid in the afterlife. It would be interesting and feel closed. :)

Incredible. One of my favorites ever, not just on this site. Thank you.

I thought this was a great ending, not a perfect HEA which would have seemed too unrealistic. It fits with both their characters that you've developed throughout the story. She has a sense of duty to the Realm of Men, and he's trying to do whatever he can to make that happen for her. They will eventually be together for eternity.

This story was absolutely wonderful. Thank you!!!

Your story was well crafted and kept me reading until the last, which is a feat in itself. I enjoyed the whole premise and the strength of your little heroine. I loved all of the human characters, and Anna's friendships and battles with them. You wrote them well the good and the evil. Kudos for that!

I am unsure how I feel about your humanizing of the God through his emotions and the discovery of love for Anna, I feel it puts the balance between him and his goddess counterpoint out of whack maybe which made the end seem to somehow to diminish him as compared to the other Gods like he had given up something for her and was now no more than a Demi-God. While the woman he loved became a Queen and Emera remained unchanged and perhaps even pitied him or at least thought less of him. I guess I just didn't like the last scene between them.

Overall it was great, thanks!

I was pleasently suprised with this story and I read it to the very end. Please keep writing more stories!!!

I thought about bailing out when she was captured and wish I had. This was totally depressing and got a bit repetitive with all the torture.

I really believe in this story, Anna is a wonderful heroine she deserves all the attention both you and Leonin can give her, am amused at the origins of the tale during a path lecture, although I suppose there are similarities.

This is by far one of my favorite things I’ve read. You have an extraordinary gift that shines in your writing. You develop characters beautifuly, they are all so unique and genuine. The way you describe all of the scenes, feelings, actions, etc is the best I’ve read in a long time. This is legitimate book-worthy quality of writing and plot development. You should be so proud of yourself! I wholeheartedly applaud your efforts, and I encourage you to continue writing. You very obviously have immense talent, and that should not be wasted

“There is no cure for birth and death save to enjoy the interval.” - George Santayana

And while Anna’s time was certainly full of heartache and anguish she was victorious on so many levels by the end.

At the start of this story; she was living and thinking like an animal. But as the story fades ... she’s the same good person in a completely different, fat better set of circumstances. She’s had a complete reversal of fortune and her world has grown beyond her wildest dreams.

You can only cheat death so many times, and Anna cheated death on numerous occasions. My God, even after dying she was even brought back to life. Still, many of you seem reluctant to let go - let her go. And sorry for the inconvenience.

I wanted her to have little demigod babies

Thank you so much for the time and care you put into crafting this wonderful tale. Finally I get my time back!

Your writing seems to have grown as this story has continued. At the start I read with passing interest and a chapter every few days I have read the last 8 chapters on the bounce unable to tear myself away, wanting to know what happened next whilst enjoying the journey. The characters have been more three dimensional and I am only sorry it has come to an end.

once again you are forcing your bdsm kink on us we are here for non con only but have to grow the sexiest lovemaking to mundane annoying bdsm

only leonid likes this kink and he is forcing his kink on her its not her idea but he simply is incapable of getting pleasure from some good old sex

he cant get off if there aint some pain

ending was really trash and open ended and vague with many possible conclusions

LOL! I wasn't planning on commenting on this ending as I know it won't make everyone happy. However, after reading the absolutely ridiculous comment below re "we are here for non con only", "annoying BDSM" and "some good old sex" all in the same (can't tell as it's grammatically incorrect and discombobulated) sentence, I had to comment. The site's categories are not MECE, thus non con and BDSM will inevitably have overlap. What I don't understand is why you bothered to read through to the very end of a very long story in the non con category, which clearly had BDSM elements from the start - and then whinge that there's not enough "good old sex" in the story? Since when did "good old sex" become nonconsensual???!!! If you're looking for "good old sex", check the 'Romance' section of this site. LOL!

Came her for the non-con, got a pretty decent fantasy story. It was an enjoyable read, not what I personally consider erotic.

I had a good time with the story, depite coming here for different reasons, so well done :)

This is one of my very favorite stories on Literotica! Have re-read it several times and get more from it each time! 😊

Carol G