All Comments on 'A Tangled Web'

Great Wriing of a good story. For me to give a story a 5 though, it has to have some taboo- incest, adultry, or such, and with them not being related; it just lacked that one part. Keep up the good work though.

As I was reading, I wondered why you chose to include the convoluted family history (first they are told their parents were killed by a drunk driver, then later on it is clarified that they came from different but related sets of parents). I couldn't understand why you would put that in the story, as it didn't seem to further the plot line.<br><br>

The pace was a little bit slow, but all in all, it was a nice build up. But the ending, when they discover they are not related in any way, detracts from the incest/taboo and I think will be a disappointment to most who read this type of story in search of that taboo. Otherwise, decent job on an "erotic coupling" story.

was it incest or wasn't it incest? That's a question that will have to be answered by each reader you have.

Incredible story and unlike a couple others, I understand fully why it is listed under the incest category and think you chose the correct heading. They were raised as sister and brother and it will be hard for society to lift that label off of them even tho in true heredity they are free to love one another freely. Your details were great - involving just enough emotional struggle to make it a realistic hurdle for them to overcome as well. Well done!

An excellent story. Some commenters have missed the point - these lovers were living with the possibility of incest and skirting the edges of it and maybe about to fall into it. Learning that they were not, after all, related allowed them to fulfill their desires in clamictic fashion (no pun intended).

I quit reading ur story as soon as I found it was more than 3 pages

I would Of liked it to continue with the sister getting pregnant before other people knew they weren't related but adopted kids still makes it incest sothe story should of been expanded on

9/10 for the story

This is certainly amongst the best stories I've read in this genre.

Keep Going!

Why does everyone write about relationships between cousins as if they are illegal? They aren't in most countries of the civilised Western world. Certainly not in European countries, the UK and Canada. The USA is the only country in the Western world where they are and then not in every state.

If you are going to write stories research is vital.

get past the first half page. With all the Bri' ish rhetoric I couldn't do any more. I guess I've read too many stories from the UK. Tired of it. The content wasn't very well written either, which didn't help.

This is a good story and well written. I like the British style probably because I was taught to speak by two English women in my early years. You British use your language well and the grammar and syntax are always proper reflecting good schooling. American writing has declined rapidly and in recent years is a sharp contrast with the product of usually excellent British writers. Too often it is not worth reading.

Your writing is a pleasure. to read.

They teased each other for so long it almost had to end in an explosive climax for both of them. No mention of birth control so I wonder if there is a baby on the way. Top story really enjoyed the read.

Disregard some very illiterate comments, very well written. BUT really need's chapter two. 5/5.