All Comments on 'A Typical Week: Tuesday'

A sweet story makes an excellent intro story. i think, though, that you could have benefitted from an editor and a re-write. i get the impression that Maddy wasn't meant to be the sole focus of the story, but hardly any attention was paid at all to Elise - what she was doing or wearing. Also, you have spelling errors that a spell-checker would not have caught. Otherwise quite nice.

Different premise.

Not particularly excited by the "master". Not my thing with respect to a male sub.

But barely a beginning.

Three stars.