All Comments on 'A Valentine's Day Gift'

But you should edit a little more carefully. One or two spelling errors and grammatical errors. Not criticising - just pointing out that sometimes small errors can detract from a good story. Still enjoyed it, though. Will you sit under my table?

flowed well, just proofread a little more closely next time!

Yeah, may have had a couple of grammatical errors but minor. At least you remembered that every time you change POV, topic, or who is speaking it is a new paragraph! :-) some of the conversations I see here! Sheesh!

The STORY was good, and the characters flowed for me. I liked that she was able to get Marcus to let her in. I hope she amply rewarded him! So how is she getting her payback?

I like to read a story about two people who love each other so

It was a real good surprise for a hubby. i may also try to this, though it is very risky. Love you

I love surprises!!

i hope you come up with a good story fore part two.

Your detail was excellent! Makes me wish you knew where I worked.

A missing word or three, doesn't hurt the story but stops the reader for a second to find the missing phrase.

Good plot, good execution and overall a nice read.

my wife surprised me at work two valentines ago, it was the most memorable time i ever had. this story was a great reminder.

I like your story. Very imaginative and strongly written. Don`t worry to much about errors. We who read for the titilation don`t give a fuck about mistakes. All we males want, and you did it to me, is to read a story that will give us a hard prick. you did that to me. Keep `em cumming Babe

John P

I loved every word. I had to translate it for my German speaking wife, who took that as a hint to give me head during the whole proceedings! Hope she'll do it for me one day. It sure beats a red rose as a Valentine's day gift