All Comments on 'A Very Happy Birthday'

Run-on sentences, poor or no punctuation, very poor grammar, missing thoughts.....

But your story was hot, hot, hot. Despite the many, many glitches, this is going to make me masturbate tonight. For that you get 4 stars. Properly edited, your tale could get 10 stars if that were possible. Please keep writing but review it carefully and have it edited before submitting it. Now I'm going to give myself the gift of a great cum!