All Comments on 'A Visit with My Mother-in-Law'

How come after the massage her bra was still on when she'd removed it and tossed it towards her bedroom?

It breaks the spell of the narrative.

The bra thingy put me off

As the other two commenters pointed out, you have a continuity error in the first of the story. Before the massage, she took her bra off. and tossed it towards the bedroom. Then after she still had it on and pushed it back up.

Do a re-edit, and resubmit. before you get fifty comments telling you the exact same thing. (Trust me, I've been there.)

Pretty good story. And not at all badly written. The best advice I can give when it comes to erotica is to try and keep the story and the sex in balance. Also, emotions beyond simple lust are one of the erotica author's best friends. Make your reader feel what the characters and you have them.

Again good job. MST

Couldn’t stop myself from just skimming through, not good

Yup I agree the bra thing set the story off

Awesome passion, well described.

Did she need two bras to hold those puppies up? No wonder her back hurt.

Dang, ya'll. It was late and I was tired of messing with it. I'll go back and fix it.

great story bad writing.

5 stars. Please continue.

Part 2 with impregnation please , XD great story

I got so hard reading this

Blew 4 massive loads reading this.

Should have wrote a part 2

Great story

Love the MIL character. Early 60s is a bonus.

Nothing beats older pussy

Five rating, because her pussy had hair on it!! "The proof of her arousal moistened and darkened her patch of brown pubic hair." No dam silly shaved "nonsense" on a character over age 40. Razor burns and chaffed skin is sickening enough on characters who are 19 with bikini line pimples (PUSSY ZITS that will also be -- in other places besides the bikini lines are -- JUST PLAIN SICKENING and DAMMED NASTY!!!!, That nasty shit will also bleed and ooze pimple put pus all over if re-shaved to freshen that sick disgusting mess up for sex. SORRY BUT NASTY SEX isn't FUCKING happening with this dude! Ladies, "I will eat my own and eat sloppy seconds from a trusted dude," from a clean non-nasty pussy. Lose the dammed razors ladies! Stubble growing from a mound covered with pimples is pointless and about as ugly as it gets next to venereal diseases. Stop shaving them!!)

The story is so amazing and sensual. Great work

Good, passionate story but, seriously, you had to leave it with an open ending?

Now I want to know what changed.