All Comments on 'A Warrior's Revenge'

That’s the story? There’s no ending. Why is it classified as Loving Wives?

This story was interesting enough to

read.Good enough for 3 stars..

@Helen1899: I agree completely. No idea why this is rated so high. Semee a bit corny on page 1, but top of page 2 was surreal in their dialog. Then all the other crazy stuff. Just meh.

Waste of time reading this hogwash. The writing is maybe high-school level with as many mistakes as there are. The dialog was something between sugarly sweet to a four year old boy trying to tell a joke. Kept waiting for the revenge but I guess it got lost somewhere in the mint juleps and the fabulous wealth that was forced on them. Two stars is all I could give for wasting my time trying to find a story somewhere in there.

Revenge? When, where, and how? The story almost felt like a documentary. It was one level above boring waiting for the revenge part. Overall, I still liked it. 4 stars.

Way to many errors in what is what in this story, too many conflicts of information. Why is Freed even around after the first page of this story. The dude just should have been gone in 10 minutes of the uncovering of what had taken place. are you this doofie in your own life you can't make a decision without months of thinking about it when you know what should take place????? Come on dude........ get a real grip in real life so it translates to your stories........ way to wishy washy.........

The Medal of Honor is Presented by: The President of the United States in the name of the United States Congress.

I sometimes get upset when the highest award for valor this nation awards to it's Heroes is misnamed as The Congressional Medal of Honor. The only tie to Congress is that is presented in the name of Congress. The award is simply recognized as the Medal of Honor with no tie to Congress.

Divertissant mais un peu gnangnan.

sweet and corny. I like corny.

From basic training to Captain and Company Commander in 4 years?

Good old Hank can hardly walk without a stick yet can pick up and carry his intended to bed?

Enjoyable and entertaining , thank you.

Bit over the top in spots, a bit weird in spots. I get the impression she was pegged like a dart board while he was gone and had the plastic surgeons give her a hymen back. Problem with that is, she didn’t know when he’d be back or even if he would.

The Alan plot makes no sense, surely he would have spoken to his mother and she would have known the difference.

Perhaps you’re going to pull a Dallas and he washes up in Walter Reid alone. This story being just a dream? Dreams don’t have to make any logical sense.

Lastly the story ends abruptly at page 5. What happened ?

There’s a story in there somewhere. Probably more than one. You just need to get in there, pull one out and finish it.

Grant

Some real plot problems, and a sketchy plot progression. Three stars.

JPB

Story was moving way too quickly leaving a trail of unanswered questions. Like why did she slap him then responded she didn't know it was him...huh. WTF?

Was it a school reunion in the gym, was he that popular; and the questions continued.

This is aside at the latter end of the story where they somehow were going on a honeymoon without a wedding?

Nice story showing promise , it just more depth and character development.

and where is the revenge?

Saves her virginity for him, then almost immediately starts talking about sex with other men, what a load of garbage, move on. I didn't star it, others liked it so I didn't want to bring the average down.

Did he really accept her declaration about the sex she intended to have with other men as being only physical, not love? The rest was king of wishy washy grade school fantasy, like the Colonel arriving in a fighter jet.

read 1st page, speed readed last page to save time. Fantasy land or la la la. so many plot errors

Good opening concept, but the rest of the story just didn't fit together.

What revenge, where was the revenge, did l miss something reading this story??

Ended up being a pile of self serving crap. Then came the talk of future cheating, WTF!!!!!

Scores 2/5

So, she said even if she had sex with another man, she would always come home to him.

If my wife ever said that to me, it would be DIVORCE immediately! There is NO joking or teasing about something like this. While reading the rest of the story, that fact always stuck in the back of my mind. It ruined the rest of the story for me. Was waiting for her to cheat.

AAA++

Learn about the marine corps and how rank progression works before writing about it. You’re protagonists would not be a captain in the corps 5 years after graduating HS…. One of a few things so wrong with your military usage

BEtween the God shit and the cuck shit...it clear you are easily within the statistics of being a Conservative with gay/bi tendencies and havent accepted them.

Sadly thats the case with sooooooooooo many of you cuck writers/readers. Stats dont lie, the other limp wristed sissies on the right like to make it seem like anyone other than their ilk, but studies say otherwise. So its kinda fun to watch them wet themselves.

On that note my dear sweet closeted little boy, I couldnt get halfway through the first page before I felt like someone kicked me in the head. I had to skim and thankfully I didnt get all full 5 pages of gay repression. A writer you are not, this wa sinane at best, badly written, thought out and carried through.

Epic fail twinkie

Your story started out fine but when you introduced future infidelities, I stopped reading.

I would like to add a term to our lexicon, here: Character Porn! This isn't a story, it's just a series of people talking about what an amazing person the main character is. Stars? There are none!

Really good story, well detailed, and quite a complex plot.

Writing wise, it was choppy. Your dialogue was too matter of fact. Your outline or thought pattern was evident but barely fleshed out at times. This story had the potential to be a real barn burner, and still does, with one helluva new edit.

Yes, it's all fantasy but many of the details just didn't work as well as everything was too fantastical. He was nominated for the CMOH, he inherited a successful corporation, his uncle dies just as he is about to exit Service. Then there is the commissioning without a bachelors degree, that Allan fooled him that Faith had left him, it just felt so awkward. The timing didn't work, as well. His fifth reunion from his community college, he had already been promoted and served as a Company Commander.

I believe this story is worthy of a kick ass editing and a rewrite, the potential is that good. 4/5 ⭐️s. I loved the story but it needs to be tightened. It needs to be greatly expanded.

Waits years for the one and only...remains virgin...reconnected and engaged instantly...THEN brings up sex with other men as a possibility further down the road!?!?!? WTF!?! Should have been called TWILIGHT ZONE SCHIZOID ANGEL/SLUT

misnamed There was not revenge. Story read like an afterschool special. Little drama and who talks like that in real life?????

My feelings are, we need another chapter! Hop to it, son!

I gave it a 4 just because of that bit at the beginning where she is talking about "just sex" with other men. That should have been a sign to leave. Plus no real revenge.

Captain at 25? Nope, especially without a college degree or a world war and its attrition of frontline combat leaders. Maybe a Lance Corporal. Otherwise, it's a great story! 5/5!!!

I see a problem coming Do you remember when she said she wanted a monogamous relationship and if anything change they would talk about it

It is now 17 years later. He comes. Home from Trying to save his company from Biden’s taxes.

She say “Honey we have to talk”

where is the next chapter? it is a good story but needs a bit more AA++

I loved it, nut where is the rest of the story? Did they ever have children, did his face ever get re-built? Whatever happened to Alan Freed?

oh wow...i almost got diabetes reading the overly contrived and sweetened dialogues that the MC s seem to converese in....dont think this is how people talk...and if baldeagle 286 speaks to his spouse like this i am sure she would be highly diabeteic by now

What a great love story, but it needed a little more in the end. I also question if she as so in love with him for the 5 years he in the Marines then why would she admit to giving blowjobs and letting guys going down on her that she was dating, just saying. Well done 5 stars

Not a bad story at all, but Alan deserved at least a little payback for what he did.

One more comment, all is not fair in love and war. You can go too far in war so that also means you can also mean you can go too far with love. (Unless you’re stupid)

After returning he got his girlfriend back and wonderfully got rich, wow.

What about the revenge part, Allen Would at the very least would have been screwed. It wouldn’t matter what his rating was in the company, what he did while Travis was away is what would have gotten his ass set on fire. Writer makeup your mind either change the title or Jack up Allen with some kind of pain.

MacDill Air Force Base, Tampa FL. I was stationed there while on active duty.

Actually, both of our boys were born in the base hospital. I really enjoyed the story. Well done.

Any other AF vets, love to hear from you.

champs472@protonmail.com

This was a romance not LW. When she mentioned recreational sex I figured OK LW category here we go. But then nothing. No real explanation on why the guy split them up as Faith never really said he kept after her. No revenge on the guy.

..... completely evaporated into empty nonsense.

And Faith’s Mom didn’t come to the wedding?

like everything just falls into place. this one belongs in sci-fi/fantasy, not LW.

I went into a sugar coma.

To sweet.. I almost had diabetes...

But could have been written in 1000-1500 words. A little fluff is ok but this was excessive.

Sickly sweet story.

Who the fuck talks like the above? And if and thats a big if she was a virgin, the HYMEN is at the entrance, not once a cock is already inside and IF she was a virgin it wouldn't be as pleasurable the first time as this dick of an author made out, I stopped reading when he/she didn't know where the hymen is.

Takin care a the ladies......shit.

....And a bit sappy!

The hype doesn't live up to the reality!

Reads like a fairy tale without even an evil witch in the story! - then just meanders to a close. For someone who was very much in love with Travis, Faith seems to have done alright in the interim, giving blowjobs and having her pussy eaten - but yes, technically she was a virgin!!!!! Could have developed into quite a tale but didn't. And the title - "A Warrior's Revenge" - Just dramatic and nothing else! 3*s.

I swear to got it felt like I was on oxy reading this

Jokes about cheating on him,

flashing from his moms house in Florida to taking him to naval base in Maryland for treatment rather than any of the thousands of hospitals in between

A crash crew having to pick him up (even though that not their job) to take him to the medical building (even though its a straight shot from the gate) no mention of getting thru the gate

His mother fucking a man withing five minutes of meeting him while her son lay dying of an infection inches from his brain all so she can get pregnant as a fifty year old

Him fucking within moments after awakening from a harrowing night of almost dying, and how the fuck did they get on her couch when just last night they were hundereds of miles away digging an infection out of his skull?

And why is Faith telling him what Mrs Burns looks like given he as talking to them when she assualted him?

I didn’t care for this story very much. It just wasn’t my kind of tale.

A little bit of a fairy tale, but good enough to keep me interested for five chapters. Would have liked a little more physical retribution, but everyone had a happy ending, so all is well.

I liked the story very much! I would have loved to see Him receive the Congressional Medal Of Honor (Anybody who receives this Medal is truly a DEEP BLUE HERO! )

Anyway That's My Comment and You get My Endorsement ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!

to fisherone her mom basically abandoned her by leaving her with the grandparents

Very detailed description of nothing much at all. It's kind of lame to be honest. I skipped dozens of paragraphs. I think they were sex scenes involving people I didn't care much about described in a rather non-erotic fashion. I don't know, since I skipped them.

Nothing happened. Five pages of words. Nothing happened.

This had so much potential but how many plot holes can one story have?

I am glad he grew up enough to not fire alan. It bugged me that if he had a jet why wasn't her mom in the wedding?

The story seems to be written by a non Marine, or maybe even someone that never served in the U.S. Military, at least in the last thirty years. However the story has a very good skeleton to work from. I believe this author has potential.

The story line was good it just needed a few more readings through to iron out the rough edges and the conflicts. I was a writer for a living and sometimes it took a hell of a lot of editing to get the hemorids out of the finished product. Sometimes there were pimples and scars left that hit me between the eyes several months after the finished product was completed. Of course I flagulated myself with a bottle of J.D. And a lot of sex from my long suffering wife. And my spelling still sucks, Shit I am almost eighty and don't really give a damn.

Tars

"The only person who had access to all that stuff was Alan."

How did he have access to all that stuff? Picture of her nieces and such?

She didnt date alan?

She gave blowjobs to guys while he was gone?

Mom never ever mentioned to her son the girl was single, still loved him, etc?

She had affair with the col who knew about the girl and didnt tell him she still loved him?

She mentioned about them sexing others?

A lot in this story doesnt add up.

It needed a part 2.

She still loved him that much but cheated on him while he was gone and "I did other things too".

The mom surely knew he would be rich.

No a lot doesnt add up, so needs more written.

In the story there's just too much not happening. It's said he stopped contacting her! So what happened when she continued to contact him? When he came back to town for the reunion she said she was going to beat Alan's ass, Then after he claimed the inheritance and got married (mistake later covered). He wanted to know what he should do About Alan. Faith then didn't want anything done to Alan, let the past bye gones be. Someone even though allowing Alan to remain untouched because he had to watch them happy as the rich powerful couple.

I have to throw the bull shit flag on that!

Alan is the lowlife who made Travis life miserable for five years for No reason! According to Faith Alan never made a pass at her or wasn't interested in her. To do nothing to Alan was a mistake. Punish Alan with extreme prejudice and anyone involved in anyway with him on any level.

He had contact with his mother he didn't tell her about Faith or his problems involving Her going with another man. Was Faith involved with Alan or not or anybody was somebody planning to rip the money off or was Alan just the face to the plan. When he was injured in combat wasn't the Col. Hurt Worse and had to be carried to help? He later found out the Col. had contact with his mother, and they had a previous relationship, how? I read the complete story there looked like you found things about the story that needed answers to be answered so you had to make up the lack of continuity with a piece thrown in information that through your story off.

His mother Sally was friends with Faith they both had a little touch up plastic surgery to look even better. 😏Sure Okay there was something under handed going on with everybody in your story.

Then for Travis to marry Faith without a prenuptial agreement was ludicrous unless in the writers world they didn't need one.(Yeah RIGHT!)

As it's written Everyone in this story needs to be watched, everyone from his mother including the Col., Faith, the former CEO of the company, to Alan.

The story wasn't very deep on information in the first place or the order of the information and the way the information was released. Just a lot of meaningless sex, very little story that make complete sense.

Either change the title and tell a Complete story either make Faith a true good girl or make her a sneaky skimmer. The way it's written Faith, his mother, the Col.,and Alan were planning to rob Travis. Which also made the the CEO party to the rip off.

The title says warrior revenge hmmm! Revenge their wasn't much! You can keep enemies close and Alan declared himself an enemy but, you get rid of enemies permanently! The smartest person in your story is Faith between bouts of sex the little bits of story showed her as one cunning woman. I'm wondering she gave blowjobs and said there were other things she did to remain a virgin. What other things she told him that no one had entered her body but, isn't her mouth part of her body? By her logic did she allow them Anal play?

Like In the old joke "the town easy to screw whore got married to a new guy in town.

They were going to honeymoon in the little cabins just at the edge of town. So all of the guys from the town who had been screwing her and had screwed every part of her body were quietly outside the cabin listening to the couple inside. They heard her tell her groom he was about to put his dick into something no dick had bee in! One of the guys listening made a comment to some of the others "oh my god he's going to stick it in her Ear!". That's the same logic Faith used about allowing penetration. she even got close to his mother behind his back. Even in fantasy world for her not knowing he was going to be a rich company owner after his uncle passed. Faith got that information from Sally. So Sally was either helping Faith or she was really dumber than moss. Five years no contact from a man why would she wait on him? (Alan) Oh, I know Sally told her about the uncles will and Travis's getting everything and Alan getting nothing.

That's what I could understand in the under written incomplete story. Faith got a boob job, so the mother got some work done too, how was that payed, and there was a lot of other sneeky stuff going on. The story ended without telling what all was happening, looks like a FTDS needs to help end this "without the sex". I never thought I'd say that!😏

This seems to be a bunch of fuck scenes held together with a poor plot with no direction. No communication between characters to the point of being laughable. Very poor story.

You keep jumping around on locations without proper lead in. For example they are at his mansion then they are suddenly at the head office.

He should have made his wife his PA. The PA position will have the most interaction within his daily schedule. The PA always travels with boss and they have adjoining offices. If he gave her an executive position, their work schedules wouldn't matchup.

You request Sally to give her personal evaluation of all supervisory personnel and secretaries. There is no way that in her previous position, she would personally know everyone.

If he was being groomed to take over the company, his uncle would have included a position in the company for him to learn how the company works. The uncle, being a business person, would never want him to take over "cold turkey".

His uncle would have made sure that Tavis was known to the CEO. Since Travis owned the company, the CEO could not unilaterally promote himself to COO. Also he would be an idiot to take over the uncle's office without approval. I would have fired him on the spot for his insolence.

Faith was a nurse in the same building as his uncle's company. She would not know very many of the workers in the company. She wouldn't be taking coffee breakers or lunches with them. Also I would guess that the number of employees would be on the order of more than 500 in the head office to maintain his uncle's style of living. Faith would be too busy looking after the two doctors to spend time with head office employees.

During the employee meeting, Travis was told that his wife was hot. If anyone had said that in my company, they would have been fired on the spot. A company president does not give out personal information during an employee meeting. He does not introduce his mother and future father-in-law to the employees unless they will be given supervisory positions in the company. The actual meeting would discuss where he was taking company, milestones, projected earnings, expansion plans, possible bonuses, etc.

but just kinda died and became boringly incomplete...

What revenge? This was a long, drawn out, incredibly boring, unbelievable story. The title doesn't say "Part One" or anything. What?!?

a 2 paragraph preface would have helped a lot. good story. flowed forward. a bit of a fairy tail. oh well, I did enjoy the story. thanks

...after half page. HUGE unbelievable plot hole.

It was just so sickly sweet that I couldn't even finish it. Guess I've just got to have characters somewhat based within reason. I'm sure someone else will love it.

It is a good story but I felt there were gaps in it. Also, and this may not make sense, the story seemed a bit jumpy and I felt like it left me hanging with inconclusive issues and information.

OK, so his mother never, ever, asked her son why he "dumped" his sweetheart? He never mentioned it to his mother?

I dont see exactly how alan was going to get by with what he did, nor why he did it?

Also, the discussion of possible sex with others was a story ender.

iT needs more just to fix the storyline.

"Silly boy, of course they are bigger, I am older." She giggled, "And I do work for a pair of Plastic Surgeons, what better way to advertize?"

And you lost me, no more emotional connection to the story.

Unless the woman is completely flat-chested the idea of implants and an instant turn-off.

Add to that if she really loved him the scars on his face would not bother her at all, no surgery required except for the eyelid.

Finally the description of the fight was ridiculous, especially where he walks out to fight them in the open, where a single bullet means death, and physically beats the last one.

Never been anywhere near combat have you son?

I gave it 5 * because of material, it moved too fast to get involved or identify with the characters. I'm assuming that Alan Freed, was a friend of the two while in school, or after, doesn't matter. a number of questions kept coming into my mind. if the uncle knew he was on his way to death, and sandy lived by herself, why didn't he invite her to live with him, especially if her son was going to inherit the whole shebang? assuming old Alan was or is a friend of Travis, did he know something about his girl friend, that he knew if Alan married her, he would be killed, fleeced, used and abused, who knows, and was trying to set him free of her? and the picture of her sister with the two kids, who's kids are they, his wife's? the age and time was right. oh I'm a virgin, grind it in baby, wobble it around a bit. Then there's the part about sandy his mother, who wasn't invited to the house with her brother, texting, calling the colonel all that time. This whole story sounded fishy. I guess that's his boyish charm, being so blind.

Alan is aware of who is boss is and what his power is. He could lose the only thing he seems to value in life, his position. He knows he's under scrutiny of the boss every day at work. He has to watch that boss loving and kissing the woman he made an aborted attempt to snare.

The first shoe dropped when he was assigned to Travis. Now he has to wait day in and day out for the other shoe to drop. Ask any combat veteran, the worst scenario is to be on alert day in and day out and no action. It's a killer.

Lovely tale, but it did sort of feel incomplete somehow.

Some have commented that there was no revenge on Alan Feed,But think about this.He has to sit in their office every day,5 days a week watching the 2 of them having what he wanted to have with her,unable to do,or say anything about it if he wanted to stay with his job that he loved so much.Yes Travis could have gone all macho beating the crap out of him,he might have publicly called him out about his lies and deceit,or he could have simply have fired him with no recommendations.He is already publicly humiliated having been caught in his lies at the class reunion having his entire graduating class knowing what he did,which would pretty much have it all over town,with almost every adult in town knowing about it in a very short time.So it looks to me like there is all sorts of revenge going on without Travis having to lift a finger to do anything.

I knew I had read this before but it turns out I never commented and only scored it 3 stars.

I do not and cannot understand why I only scored it a 3 it is as good as any story this writer has up and his effort is as great (which is a large part of how a score things).

Thank you for the story -

I do wish it had a follow up - the 2 couples have a fun potential future - but this story is complete and satisfying to me.

In my humble opinion, this is an excellent story, well-written with a subtle hand and that left me hoping for a sequel, even if it doesn't evolve from the scenario I sketched out below.

This re. Tw0Cr0ws comments: Do you not see that the stage was set at the very end for the greatest revenge of all, that of forgiveness? What if Travis and Faith could pull off a life-long revenge, with magnanimity, in a sequel? (see below)

Scenario: What if we find Alan always having been in need of what he had stolen from Travis and Faith in their time of greater need? What if he ended up with whom he was known to be enamored, with the assistance of his two victims? If you were Alan, how would you feel then? Perchance, could great respect and remorse forever remembered be your/his fate?

As Alan can't give back what he stole, might Travis accept Alan's eternal loyalty and fealty in exchange? Is it not the ONLY way the enormous debt may be repaid? And, it could be told from Alan's perspective, a fitting shift in focus. The stage is set and it fits in my mind.

Faith considers Travis' mother to be her best friend but neither of them do anything to find out why Travis never communicates with Faith. Really?

Does that seem like the way a mother would act about a woman she would expect and want to be her daughter-in-law?

A very good story. Well told with a happy ending.

The writing was excellent.

the story has some issues.

One: there was no revenge on this freed guy. He spent years lying and destroying their relationship and no revenge?

two: his mother nor anyone form his home town, in five years, ever mentioned her nor did they ask why he didnt contact her. Even his mother?

three: I would be somewhat concerned at her early on comment about other partners even thou she said kidding. She again mentioned something similar later on.

four: fives years is a longgggggggggg time. more realistic the story should have set this at perhaps 1 tour overseas, a year maybe 2 tops.

There is no revenge in this story.

Alan Freed sent a false "Dear John" letter that could well have lead Travis to kill himself, and he loses nothing.

False advertising in the title.

Great story. I hate the wife leaving a man a wreck or her dying, etc.

Pretty much a non story! You gave us all the background in five chapters that most writers would do in one....then nothing at the end?

Alternate ending: Travis calls the big meeting to announce that Faith was really married to Alan and had twins but when she found out about Travis inheritance she and Alan devised a plan to get his money.....

Could have been way more fun!

It's not a bad story in general, but I find most characters' actions and behavior a bit strange and unnatural. Furthermore, the story as you advertised it is a bit misleading.

And the story has what to do with the title, or description?

pretty much a non story. What does the tale actually tell us about the revenge? Or how they resolved being duped "years before"?

False advertising at it's worst!!!

The United States Code contains the general codification of Federal law. Tittle 10 of the Code is entitled, "Armed Forces". Summarizing and generalizing, Title 10 contains the laws under which the Armed Forces operate. it covers everything from who can function as a Notary (Section 1044a), to why junior ranking personnel salute Chaplains, but why Chaplains can't command (Section 3581 for Army Chaplains, similar sections exist for other Branches). The law about the medal is at Section 3741, which is entitled:

MEDAL OF HONOR: AWARD

The section itself states:

The President may award, and present in the name of Congress, a medal of honor of appropriate design, with ribbons and appurtenances, to a person who while a member of the Army, distinguished himself conspicuously by gallantry and intrepidity at the risk of his life above and beyond the call of duty— [etc.]

So it is the Medal of Honor, but after DOD and the President decides to whom it is awarded, the award of the medal itself is to be done in the name of the Congress. (As if those fine ladies and gentlemen had anything whatsoever to do with it!)

The emotion was there somewhere but it never burst out at you. Most Marines I've had the honor and privilege to know, were a little more assertive and very protective of their significant others and close associates and family. It is out of character for Travis to put Mr Freed in the same proximity as he and his wife. I'm referring to the office space in which Mr Freed was assigned when Travis took over his Uncle's company. It made no sense. Also, I have read the comments regarding the medal of honor and congressional medal of honor...I think both cases are correct in a sense. Colloquially it is referred to as the congressional medal but properly in formality it is the "medal of honor". I would say both designations are correct depending upon the circumstances in the usage. I just wish I had one of my own to look at to give more information about. This story had Walter Mitty feel to it in some small way. I really enjoyed it and I wish this author threw a few more heavy ensuing chapters. Overall thank you for the entertainment.

The emotion was there somewhere but it never burst out at you. Most Marines I've had the honor and privilege to know, were a little more assertive and very protective of their significant others and close associates and family. It is out of character for Travis to put Mr Freed in the same proximity as he and his wife. I'm referring to the office space in which Mr Freed was assigned when Travis took over his Uncle's company. It made no sense. Also, I have read the comments regarding the medal of honor and congressional medal of honor...I think both cases are correct in a sense. Colloquially it is referred to as the congressional medal but properly in formality it is the "medal of honor". I would say both designations are correct depending upon the circumstances in the usage. I just wish I had one of my own to look at to give more information about. This story had Walter Mitty feel to it in some small way. I really enjoyed it and I wish this author threw a few more heavy ensuing chapters. Overall thank you for the entertainment.

There is no way in hell that Allan would kept around after what he did. This shit about the best revenge is living well is a pile crap created by counselors and therapists that have never experienced real pain themselves. If this was really the case then the US should not have gone after Osama bin Ladin after the World Trade Tower incident, we should have just tried to get our revenge by living better. I know that my position will offend some people but the only reason the pacifists and panty wastes are around to say what they are saying is that someone somewhere stood up to the bullies and aggressors making the world safe for them.

Revenge is a life well lived. This is a dual love story and a beautiful one. I have read 3 of Grey Eagle's stories and loved all of them.

I get this image of a high school A-V nerd who wants to be in junior ROTC and who spends his lonely nights and weekends reading Literotica and comic books.

story still has a lot of possibility to go much farther. been a while but would love to see more.

Who speaks like this? Some of the dialog is way over the top.

So it has a few mistakes in the Medal and such. I'm retired Military and I'll give that a pass, Most folks don't have a clue there.

And yes, he skimmed over the speed they got back together and such things, No big deal.

I would like to see a follow up story covering the next few years.

And give us some closure on Alan Freed. Seems like he needs a boot in the ass but perhaps in a positive way, to get him away from being a workaholic and having a life.

The author arrange all the pieces of the puzzle with very few flaws. The resolution to the unforgivable behavior by Mr Freed seemed a little unresolved. Although the author made mention of a conversation that resembled a passing comment between husband and wife at the end but I had no real resolve in my heart of hearts as to the exacting of an appropriate punishment. Also, what did not add up was the fact as to how the fantastic facts could be digested without any questionings on a more aggressive manner than how the facts unfolded. The reliability of the authors information about this matter was stretched with full force afforded to literary construction. The apparent love story was certainly not lacking in character embellishments to the umpth degree. In spite of this the story had a cinderalla effect for all it was worth and flowed to a set of stingy taunting of unfolded drama by the skillful hands of this masterful author allowing the poor reader to beg for more ti read on and on.

The author covered a lot of ground from elaborate sexual encounters jealousy unconditional love chivalry human wisdom and of course compassion. The story begs for a sequel however fulfills its mission to give the reader some splice in knowing everything is okay. All's well that ends well and Thames you you for that Mr Author. Thank you for a beautiful stimulating fantasy that separated life's little trivialities from my conscious mind. Great Job!!!! Please continue writing these enjoyable stories for the joy they bring to this reader!!