All Comments on 'A Whole New World Ch. 01'
by MikeLowrey
- 7 Comments
Anonymousover 4 years agoPlease keep this story going! Great chemistry between all three and would love to read Mandy and Amber enjoying each other! So many possibilities...
bigbob2406over 4 years agoGreat story. Definitely needs a follow on. Please don't just let it end there!!
Anonymousover 4 years agoDo hope there is a part 2 coming, as the previous comment says, so many possibilities. Thanks
Anonymousover 4 years agoGreat first post, very exciting topic. I would personally like to hear more stories from you. I like the “married couple are on the same page” stories where it’s a positive experience for all.
It was a bit long for a single story, finding a way to break it up into a couple chapters would help from a readability standpoint. I would also recommend challenging yourself on some of the details - “does this really advance the story? Does this add depth to the characters or plot?” Much of the detail does add to the story, knowing how the characters think and feel makes for a bigger payoff for the reader, but some of it could be trimmed without sacrificing story quality.
Hoping for more!
Infosaugerover 2 years agoI would like to read about Amber and Mandy meet while husband is on factime. Later on a threesome with them.
I could see a permanent relationship between these three.
Maybe a threesome with Alex and Amber and later one Alex and Mandy become a pair and build a lasting foursome.
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