All Comments on 'A Whore for the King Pt. 05'

The only problem, this was to short! ;)

I agree with the “too short” comment. Sometimes this feels more like a plot outline than anything. It’s still worth reading, though.

You are now dealing with the psychological. It is a powerful tool but it has drawbacks. Tread softly and allow sarah to be human and not a spirit. As usual geat writing.

You explain at the outset that this is set in a fictional early kingdom in ancient England. As with the Game of Thrones, no one can fault you with anachronism and the reader is free to indulge their fantasies without reference to actual history. Now, however, you insert an element of Christianity, which has its own history in the real, non-fictional world. It does not detract from the excellence of your storytelling, but it does drift you into dangerous waters.

5 stars, unquestionably.

so cheating?