All Comments on 'Abigail Moves In'

An excellent story by an author who demonstrates a firm command of the approved elements of style and the fundsmemtals of good writing. A most enjoyable tale, with good character development, an interesting plot and an original variation on an established theme. A bit more editing to catch obvious errors would help.

Now to the fun part—the sex! Although there were some clearly implausible parts of the story (the penis art, ad nauseum), the sex scenes were erotically done and sensually displayed for the readers. Future installments should include more sex and less long, slow recitations of what kur little girl is thinking while people are fucking.

All in all, a fine effort. 5 stars for you!