All Comments on 'Accidental Arousal Ch. 02'

Good story, with gentle build up, and ability to generate character images in a somwhat real life way. Please re-read and check minor grammar issues. I enjoy the style, I like to think somewhat like mine. Wish I had more time to write, have received positive comments from my stories and requests to continue but never find the time. Keep the story going and please watch the grammar (a fault I know I have). Should you care I have several stories under my handle engagemind.

Thank you for the comment! Being quite the newbie I failed to use an editor and despite reading and re-reading am sad to say this submission could have been much better had I been more careful. However I have learned from my mistake and for chapter three am happy to say I have an editor lined up! :) Now I am not sure if I should just chalk this up to experience and leave it be or if I should re-check for errors and re-submit.

I will certainly look for your stories! Again, thank you for reading my submission and leaving feedback. I do appreciate It!

Your writing style is very descriptive and enjoyable. It is rare to see such a talented descriptive writer who writes in a style where one really feels they are there in the scene. I love it and keep it up. The "one" minor grammatical or spelling error was nothing. Do not beat yourself up for it.

My only criticism in these two submissions would be that they are very very short. If this story was longer it would be much better. Obviously this means more delay in submissions which is a trade off. In my case it is preferred. I think the two submissions easily could have been part 1.

Please make the next submission longer and make sure Bree gets into the scene (or actually Kurt gets into Bree's scene p).

Well thank-you for your compliment and the advice...:)

I am actually re-structuring my chapters 3 and 4 to make them into 1. Hopefully it will be more enjoyable this way!

Hope you keep reading! :D