All Comments on 'Ace of Hearts Ch. 01'

Hot af

Cute story. The hetro sex was a turn-off.

Wow, would really like to see this continue.

Also, I’m kinda suspicious of how all the women know him for over a year before John meets him. Makes me wonder if Asa fucked all of them and is planning to fuck John next

This is a great start. Very intriguing and well-written.

damm. So HOT

i NEED a second part of this.

not great... Either write the story in ENGLISH or spanish not both, it IS very annoying !

WOW!!! "Ace of Hearts" is all aces with me. OMG, for having only a small amount of sex, this story was HOT as hell. Very well written and the back-and-forth banter was spot on. Can't wait to see what happens next between Jonny and Asa. If this is your first story here, you've got a hit the first time out. Five stars plus. Thanks, MLF

Great start and love the sex scene between Jonny and Tara

Please keep writing, I’m already interested in seeing what happens next between Asa and Jonny. The tension is great

To the Anonymous who wrote English or Spanish not both, you probably won't read this but here goes. I going to play devil's advocate here. First, practically all of the story was written in English. The small phrases in Spanish were only showing where this family originated from. In doing this it made the characters seem real. And finally, I hope this is not the case, but your comment makes you look a little bigoted. MLF

Interesting plot, love the development of the story and the characters, would love to see what happens next; funny as hell. An observation: translate the Spanish please.

Hi, thanks so much everyone for the feedback! It's super cool, this is my first story here. Couple of things, there is more of this story coming in!

I love your writing style! So sassy! Can’t wait to see what else you come up with.

This story is so good. I'm not fan of cheating. However, I can feel the chemistry through my screen it's insane. I really hope this a series that will be completed.

This gives me "Bent" vibe. I like "Bent" though, so I'm expecting to like this as well.

Too much str8 sex for me. Should be in the BI section. He hasn’t even described his cock yet, but i know exactly what Tara’s vj looks like

OK…first, there is NO BI SECTION on Literotica, which is a problem, but the author told you it was going to start off hetero and you chose to keep reading and now you have the gall to complain?

Second, readers who are complaining about Spanish phrases in a story about a Spanish speaking family…grow up. Google it or read something else if you can’t figure it out in context. Some people are bisexual. Some people are bilingual. This story is awesome; if you’re too bi-assed to see that, read something else!

Have to re read. So in love with this story swear to god !!!

Love this. The snippets of Spanish in here are necessary color that make the characters believable. Don’t cut them! I can FEEL the heat between the characters and can’t wait to see what happens next!

this is extremely well written and the dialogues are expertly composed! great job :)

I've reread this several times and it's still one of my all time favourites. I hope you keep on writing more stories.