All Comments on 'After Life Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Interesting

But... Double katanas? Sounds more like an Anime or light novel. I wish he would be a little suspicious and not jump to save someone so easily. Other than that, not a bad start. Looking forward for the next chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Pretty Good

I think an explanation of the main characters martial arts skills is probably called for but other than that it's a good start..

disableddandisableddanalmost 9 years ago
An interesting start

A bit unrealistic, perhaps.... a teen ager who knows swordplay that well? But it's a good start. I'll be interested to see where you take this.

bejeweledcatbejeweledcatalmost 11 years ago
Great start

I really enjoyed After Life Ch. 1 when I first read it. I hope you will continue it; I check in for updates on a fairly regular basis.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
cant wait for more

Cant wait to see where this story goes. Looking forward to chapter 2

RobertNickRobertNickover 11 years ago
A great story so far.

Indeed, a zombie story is not one of the most original themes on this website, but you have quite the potential to turn it into a masterpiece. Keep working on the series and don't give up ! I have a new favorite writer :)

racoon1174racoon1174over 11 years ago
Not a bad first effort

The writing wasn't bad for the description pieces, genreal mood and the setting establishment. The character dialogue was a bit on the campy side but that will improve with more practice. A really solid first effort. I look forward to reading (hopefully much) more.

Rawmaster50Rawmaster50over 11 years ago
Good start

Not the most original theme here, but well done none the less. The female showing up was not a surprise, but it is an erotic story site and masturbation does get a bit limited. The zombies are a tiny bit cliche right now, but not unexpected once they danced into the story and idiotic bikers were a bit of a relief. All in all a good effort and wanting to read more about these characters.

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