All Comments on 'After the Burn Pt. 01'

I really liked the movie "The Book of Eli" but this part, the way you write it, is MUCH more realistic than it was in the movie. You write well.

No talent of your own? At least give a passing reference to your source, when you steal something. The first part of this is just hack plagiarism.

I was surprised at this comment, but I welcome it.

I honestly dont know who wrote it, but I did state, I thought, quite clearly that it was a re-write and where the idea came from. I see your point those that credit should be given to the original writer who, froom what the Google tells me is/was Gary Whitta.

@Anonymously - I don't doubt someone besides the writers of "The Book of Eli" wrote a story like the one I just read but in no way is this story plagiarism. Its just a simple Fanfic.

@ Aln80017 - Amazing story. I cannot wait for you to submit the next chapter.

I enjoyed this first chapter, but you need to watch your writing when it comes to past and present tense. Most of Alex's actions are present (ex: Alex watches as they spring forward), while the other characters use past (ex: Tessa sighed, she was sad). For story writing, past tense is the preferred method because the author is relaying a narrative that happened rather than present tense where the reader would be living it.

good start!... just... maybe an editor, freelance...